by annaswirls
Extraordinary. That's an inadequate description, but will have to do; I'm not quite sure how to react. It's not erotic, but it's definitely sexual, in that no man could have written it.
looks like some of that creative vote disppearing to get you up there. hope you appreciate it, cuz this poem sucks
o anna who swirls her words like delicious liquorish
I raise my glassy eyes to you to who to wit to woo
such a deep seed journal journey back my dear dear diary
I thank you for trip and for the stain torn page
past from past to forward future in the coming moments
of grils that dance to women
I have never felt less competant to comment other than to say aren't there two L's in Michele? - so I won't say anything other than wow!
Thank you for a grat coming of age; and thank you for the courage!
A wonderful piece
With a bit of an edge;
Reminded me of that moment
So many years ago
My pre-teen's concerns that something was wrong ~
The red stain unexpected
And in that wonderful innocence shows it to her Dad;
An unplanned trip to the store
Buy her first box of womanhood
And explain to her the joys of womanhood
That will be with her for another forty years or so...
Love the telling, showing and glimpse into reality.
Your a damn good poet !!
The point being ...
This as much as anything is a part of life. We color it, package it and sell it ... So Bravo my friend for staying true and honest in the pictures you so brillantly paint.
I remember studying those damn tampon boxes, looking for where the clitoris was. Of course, they didn't show that.
Thanks for the poem, Anna. Vivid and evocative. --C.o.S.
this poem was mention on the thread 'New Poem Reviews'
thanks for the literary journey (~_~)
and its not really a problem, of course , is yuo are so fucking honest!! and some people do not know how to deal with that. GDP's comment also is honest.
I dont really like "that part", but its necessary to the rest of the work, showing what the young woman went through in her bloodquest.
sometimes you are too good for your OWN good ;)
xoxox
maria
thank you, giant dripping pussy, for the read and comment-- I agree with your view on that line, its language is too harsh, I wanted to mention the excrement and waste, not sure what words to use? As far as the Erotic category, I had this m,omentary lapse of reason, thinking that I needed to put an erotic lable on it to protect the eyes of the innocent from sexual content eh hem, forgetting I was on a porn site.
aye aye aye you are right, funny as I usually get nabbed for putting non-erotic on something that is meant to be provokative.
~anna
Very real. Not sure about putting it in the erotic category. I don't really like this part:
there in the middle of my other “don’t talk about it” openings shit
blood piss I counted the three