by theoncomingstorm
You created an amazing structure by making those 'with you' stand alone. Repetition is indeed your ally on this one.
That is so poignant, I like your rhymes and near rhymes. Thanks for the read and 5ed
This is very nice indeed. The combination of structure, repitition and plain words works very well indeed to convey the poignancy.
It is good to see you flexing your muscles and varying the styles and messages.