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Unusual set up and metaphor, and a great ending!

Excellent erotic poem.

Thank you for the read!

This is better than good! Whodathunk I'd say that? Thank you, Mischievous!

I love the metaphor here, and the last two lines are gorgeous. I have never heard it described this way, and it works!

"and as it approached,

it was as if

she were made of kindling

the rush of startled birds

abandoning a tree"

you might consider changing the title, it is too common (around here at least) I did not read it at first as I thought oh another orgasm poem. Thanks to the New Poems reveiws I gave it a shot and was glad I did!

~annaswirls

Steady on ...

Very nice * Ride * here.

Approach with caution ~

*grins*

Great flow, and the imagery ...

Untouchable and fresh ~

More Plaese ~