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Pig till her ghost is laid.

grey flame red blood 2 colours Tazz

sorry seems all a little long, and pointless except for the knife

4ed

Am I missing some myth of the moors? Pig as in the narrator is a pig?

This might have worked well as part of this month's Haunted Ballad challenge (see Forum).

How is it possible to get a high score on a poem that is not understood? You could make a fortune if you bottled the formula for your success! *grins*

I liked it the first time, and I still like it now. And yes, he IS a pig! That ghost needs to roast his a**!!!

The poem is about the narrator and what a cad he is (love that word) . If you want to make him really frightening you might have avoided giving the rapee and her true lover names. If she had remained only she, she would have remained an object in the narrator/rapists mind and her true lover might also not be named. A name makes a character human. The Pig makes these characters inadvertantly human. If you're going to write about a bastard from a first person point of view you have to get in the mind of the Pig and think and speak as him. You weren't nasty enough to be really convincing. If you wrote from Pig's point of view really convincingly you would have offended readers sensibilities and they would have given you ones and twos. Thus a four in this instance indicates okayish. Pig needs to be much nastier.

truer words should have spoke the why & what, TK U MLJ LV NV

Five.