by HarryHill
Well.... I am well and thoroughly confused. Is the poet writing computer code in the can?! And..two lids down? Must be a female about...
enjoyed the opening and finish for their originality
this central piece reads as a limerick but, for me, would read even cleaner with either an extra syllable in its last line OR by removing one or two beforehand. for example:
The Anon for the most part are kind.
The Invisible are fickle but fair,
but for the most part I find
the most critical Mind
is the one that sits here in this chair.
OR
The Anon for the most part are kind,
the Invisible fickle but fair;
for the most part I find
the most critical mind
is the one sitting here in this chair/is the one that sits here in this chair.
.......................
edit. x
Now go wash your hands
just my thoughts, HH. don't get in a crappy mood, k? :p
Saw flaws as soon as it dropped
this would have worked to avoid repetion
but actually I find
the most critical Mind
often sits in this chair.
...
Not in a crappy mood, explained concept to Desejo in an EM she may share it with you if you ask
.................. thanks all
beckons all that falter from the demom spirits, TK U MLJ LV NV
anon no mous
come on out
an show your puss
is that why you put the lid down, harry?
ok i had fun, 5