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KerilaBleboKerilaBleboalmost 7 years agoAuthor
Shameless self-promotion

Hey, it's about time someone said how awesome/-ful this is!

KerilaBleboKerilaBleboover 6 years agoAuthor
Emendations:

Can't stop working on the thing. A few tweaks to improve the sound:

III

"Descends on us with gentleness,

defenceless as her gender is:"

IV

"She'll work on us, twerk on us" --flows more easily, rhymes better with the rest of the verse.

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