All Comments on 'Proposal'

The way your soul seeks, the sweetness that is in it, in you. Please keep writing.

... at the core of our beings. I can hear the music of this poem. It sings to me. ~Imp

Loved the simplicity of the structure and the language.It seemed to give the poem a quiet power that really worked. Excellent work, Mat.

Your poems speak to my heart. The age old questions we all face when we love...tentative, yet powerful. It's lovely.

... can be interpreted in a few different ways. I chose to view th italics as a sub-vocalization following the other question, which to me increased the sense of longing and the joyful agonizing uneaseiness of self doubt that goes along with love. Good effort Mat and a wonderful idea with the structure.

Lovely poem, Mat...it speaks volumes

~Honey

Is it sad that I was not moved, but instead comforted? I know not. If I knew just one person who was half as kind and enriched as you then my life may have been better in its early years. I know your words and your meanings. To say I understand is an understatement. I know. It breaks my heart to see words as these. It means that there is pain and lonliness. In the same regard, it comforts me. I know that I myself am not alone and that others have the same grinding road. When one shares themselves to others as you have, you'll find that you'll attract those that you need exactly when you need them. Don't ever change beautiful. You're friends flock to you at the time you need them most. It does help when you provide such a powerful light to draw them to you. You are brave and beautiful.

I can't PC on poetry because I never have the words to express how they move my soul.

You made very nice use of structure here, letting the soft, pattering rhythm fall on the reader. It's almost like ... rain, a gentle, soothing sound. I liked the use of the italics in the last lines as well; a worse poet might have erred by using them too pointedly, but here the pattern and rythmn support the device perfectly. A very pleasurable read.

deeply moving. voicing that uncertainty...heart trapped in my throat.

kudos, matski.

Clearly speaks of hope and of what the person is willing to offer. Nicely done!

As you read it, it gently pulls you in until the last 3 lines... and then it sucks you right in! Reading the last 3, i had to remind myself to breathe, lump in the throat moment. xxx

I loved it, it touched me and moved me, this is a poem i know i will come back to time after time and take comfort in. Good work

If you know what I mean, but then again, I'm prejudiced. :)

in the offer, yet sad in the questioning. Love freely given doesn't automatically mean it will be accapted - you speak of truth. Great work, mat. Thanks. LJ