by celisnebula
That was really beautiful. This is the first non-erotic writting I've read after three years on literotica. First of all, it's much more erotic than a lot of the poking and probing you'll read in other areas. Secondly it will prompt me to post some of my own stuff now. This is one of those poems that the more you read it, the more you can visualize. Also, read it S l o w l y for the full effect!
writing and structure.
takes the reader along on the journey.
And some really nice phrases also.
very nice work
keep it up
and thank you
wonderful erotica, though not subtle, your poem is compelling without the vulgarity often associated with erotica here at lit. Well done...
jim :)
Simply beautiful, erotic without being crass, lovely word use...dang, I loved it.
ssong
I like the spacing you used on this poem. It carried
the work on and on, and I enjoyed every step.