All Comments on 'Snail Tale II'

I liked the original but this is much cleaner and smoother in the telling. Great edit.

Then & i love it Now !!5-ed.

I am very glad you both edited the original and submitted this. It is a bit hard to stand back and see how it must look to someone who has not seen the original – and the discussions that followed. I am impressed that essentially you cut out rather than adding. The removal of the 2nd and 3rd verses was right. You now have captured the essence of what you felt and wanted to express simply and elegantly and it is a very fine piece of writing.

Loved it the second time