All Comments on 'The Collar Within'

I think a lil more imagery

would have been great, but as it is

... still GOOD !!!

We hear the inner HER speaking out,

very passionate read here ...

Welcome to Lit. I like your style.

Just a lil more

Ummphhh and ya got it. *grins*

More Please ~

Good beginning...keep it up! A sincere, first hand expression can be felt throughout. The physical "member" and "pounding" seemed to begin to stray from the overall "emotional" context. Overall slave desire for her Master is well expressed. dsow

I think lifestylers should have potential partners or submissives read this and decipher the meanings. Is this just a poem or how you ache with steel around your neck?

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