All Comments on 'The Hayfield'

Welcome to the poetry side! A simple, clever piece that is well-constructed (though how you get "bower" to rhyme with "mower" I don't know!). Be sure to stop by the poetry forum to join discussions of the craft.

Fly

I like witty humor mingled with erotic words (~_~) nice write! My mouth moves the same in 'bower' and 'mower' <grinin'

Thanks - keep writing and welcome to Lit.

Tess

You win! See all the nice poetry people here?

wonderful!!

but you shoulda used "ass"

;)

good work, you made rhyming fun, not tedious work that attempted to be concealed as seamless artsy poetry

maria