All Comments on 'The Offering'

Will spread, and hands confined to the dream-state

now that's a line worth writing. original, sensual, otherness... a descent into sensuality

nice use throughout of sound, and i found this to be quite well handled for its topic, avoiding most the pitfalls... what remains, though, echoes on beyond the poem is that one line i pulled out. it's something quite special!

I like to try to convey a feeling in my poetry without becoming crude, no matter what the topic. I am glad that you could appreciate that, thanks again.

this is kind of an interesting inversion of the normal structure. again

read some poetry, make it a little newer

thanks for the input, it's appreciated

you have some goods, so keep at it. Keep posting and learning.