- Non-Erotic Poetry
- The Old Apple Tree
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Click hereGoing back to the place I call home
The place I ran and played,
Going home to start again
I remember the happy days.
When life was easy and troubles were few
The future a place far from my view,
With braids in my hair and cuts on my knee and
The swing which hung from the old Apple tree.
The branch that I climbed and eventually fell
The heart that I carved saying J loves L,
The shade it provided where I had my first fumble
And the sweet smell of cinnamon from mum’s apple crumble.
The apple which rustled then fell on my head
The swear word I used that got me sent early to bed,
The tree house I wanted that never got built and
The picnics we had on the old patchwork quilt.
Those were the times when I knew no danger
Theses days my smile is becoming a stranger,
But when I look back through my memories
The warmest of all is that old apple tree
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 18 years agoThere it is,
the simple solution we all like,
embodied by that old Apple Tree.....
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoWill you meet me under that tree? I could offer you more than an apple.
Your poetry never fails to move me, Jennifer. Keep on writing, please.
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoUnlike the greater poets who dislike rhyme. I dig it
like a shovel. It makes the work easy to remember and a
joy to read. This poem is good, but the rhythm is off
some what. Still, I liked the picture it gave me as a reader. Mine was a weeping willow. sand
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoI admire you for trying something new - a tricky format. Well done! Keep writing.
Tess
My Erotic Talealmost 19 years agowe had a pear tree in our yard and I feel the same way about it, great imagery and wonderful poem.
Jennifer Calmost 19 years agoAuthorDon't worry about the links not working, if anyone wants to view the thread it's in the 'Recognition for new poets' thread in the poetry and disscusion forum on the bulletin board.
Also any new poets who would like to introduce themselves to Lit pls come along and do so
Thanks
~Jenn
dcpoet44almost 19 years agoof long ago certainly reminded me of a few of mine. it is amazing how we can think of those things and see the differences of what is in our present life. you have some wonderful images here. it's a nice little story. i see you've used some rhyme....always tough to work with when it comes to form. i admire that....nice little piece.....don
champagne1982almost 19 years agoThat link doesn't work. Sorry my bad! This one should... http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?t=349929&page=2&pp=25
Carrie
champagne1982almost 19 years agoHi Jenn
I enjoyed your effort and appreciate your honesty. To really test your rhyme potential you may want to try a form poem, such as a terzanelle, a rubiyat or even (gasp) a sonnet. Thanks for the poetry.
Permit me to give the link to your thread http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=13236788#post13236788 - if you can't click and open this link, just copy it and then paste it into the address window on a new browser window. I've left a detailed commentary and crit there.
