All Comments on 'The Park'

I love the story, but it seems uncomfortable in the form you have it in. Maybe it's just me,but I did enjoy reading it.I wish there was a score thing closer to 90....

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I've given 5's for a lot less, wish the first two lines were better, some lines rather stock, nothing cliched that sticks in your face.

as if they are no longer alive

and some of them aren't - and some of them are no longer here? and some aren't...? line you have, doesn't quite wok for me.