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There <B>was</B> a <B>day</B> (NO comma) when <B>all</B> seemed <B>right</B>,NOW comma)

<B>Sky</B> was <B>blue</B>, no <B>sound</B> of <B>fight</B>

But now my day is slow to start,

My thoughts of you, my broken heart.

Can you here the rythmn? Ta <B>tum</B> ta <B>tum</B>. Try reading your poem aloud and beat out the rythmn as you do - a) your poem will be more readable and b) the rhyming will come more easily. Hope this helps. Keep writing.

There used too be the day, when everything seemed so right,

Sky was blue, and there were no sounds of a fight.

And now my day takes so much longer too start out,

My thoughts of you and nothing else about.