by oneiria
some people had problems with me using the word "squirms" and I was only speaking of maggots ...
I have a teeny problem with "burps up" in a poem that is otherwise close to elegant.
I like this line-
~~alien tubeworms and bacteria~~
especially because I have used something similar in an old poem on the passion thread. Also, I really don;t get the use of the elaborate positioning of the poem, it doesn't do anything for the poem, IMO... anyway, I did enjoy the read :)
~ maria
A magnificent poem! I thoroughly got it! The imagery is frightening and I think that is what I like the most about this poem! Well done!
I've looked at your stuff 3 or 4 times, I can't figure out what's going on, I'll assume it's me.
5
Another interesting poem that doesn't quite seem to deserve a five, but gets one anyway.
This is really good. Epic stuff, stirring, Wagnerian. I think you lose the meaning thread a bit in the death section though, still excellent though. Getting a recommend. You write very well and I am interested in what comes next.
and read it again
and would come back for more. you throw up interesting work.