All Comments on 'What I want'

i really enjoyed the description and thew way you managed to make it all rhyme was really great, and i know i'm no judge, but i found the fact that the lines had different numbers of syllables frustrating as it disru[ted the rhythm of the poem. Then again, i dont want to sound like im giving you really negative feeback because ive had some of that, and its disheartening, so ill end by saying how i enjoyed the poem. ill also leave my name so you can contact me or read my two submissions (nowhere near as good or as heavy in quantity as yours, but im a newbie)

i also apologise for the amount of typos in that comment, really shocking for me as im usually a bit of a perfectionist when it comes to spelling and grammar.