All Comments on 'What She Has To Give'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

This sounds like it would make great lyrics to a song! I love it!

CoryleaCoryleaover 15 years ago
Desperation

I love the desperate tone of this poem and the rueful realization of the last line.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
perfect

absolutely perfect... violetflower

wildsweetonewildsweetoneover 16 years ago
well that's got me thinking!

a great portrayal of that incredibly fine line. loved this poem. i love the way the read speeds up. i like your line end words - each is important and meaningful, including 'it'. excellent.

critique - i stumbled in the 'yield' line as i misread. (i'm still learning how to read poetry without the same punctuation i expect when i read prose).

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