All Comments on 'Why the Lash?'

u shoulda stopped at the first paragraph....there is a preview feature, use it///////

Poetically it is a bit weak as it really is a paragraph broken into lines. But I give you a 5 anyway because it gives a wonderful feel for why a submissive craves submission. One of the finest explanations I have ever heard. Well done on that account!

Well done!

As Koba said, it gives one some insight into the relationship. It could, though, be improved through the use of images as the means of conveying the emotion--currently the narrator is more or less just telling the reader what she feels. Though, having said that, Poet Guy is unable to make any clever suggestions on imagery the author might use.