All Comments on '6 pm Cometh'

That is a very interesting tale.

None of the characters have any redeeming features!

5

straight shooter is just as bad as she is

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Liked it.

Despite your preface caveats I found it easy to read and enjoyable. Thanks

Predictable but cute. Good flash.

Good for a short story. I think your writing is better than many other ESL writers in LE

3rd language? Doesn't delete comments? Intelligence and strong character. As for the story, I like the twist. Keep writing!

Not sure who Shweta is, but the rest is clever. I can only imagine the Chaos that would insure when lover boy realizes he has already confessed to the hubby.

a bit confusing to follow but a nice twist at the end

Good one. Quite a humorous tale.

Interestingly clever plot.

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"Amar (at 6:00 PM) turns to Radha and speaks, "Here is Mohit." Radha was not listening as she saw Ravi walking towards her."

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What happened as Ravi got near Radha?

-the ending was...

-non-existent.

-FTDS please.

Impossible to keep track of the character's names. Made zero sense to me.

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It's great to see you are posting again! Welcome back. 5 stars from me!

Not your best effort.

Language aside, we’ll done. I did not see that coming! 5*

Do you even have the ability to write more than one-page essays?

I enjoyed it. If you hadnt said there was a twist at the end I wouldnt have figured out early on where this was going. Next time, dont give away that theres a twist.

2 in one day. Keep up the good work, please.

Pretty sure we dont need any more of an ending.....if people would actually read it they would have noticed this little gem " I know that he will not think a minute before divorcing me if he comes to know that I am fucking Ravi more often than him. "

Pretty sure THEY ARE GETTING A FUCKING DIVORCE!!!

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So, no downside for the wife (then again, this is implied to be India, so maybe their legal system isn't as man hating as US?). Therefore, despite a clever twist, only 3 stars. I think this could have been worked to a really great BTB, with a bit of extra additions.

@musky - seriously? There's LITERALLY only 3 characters. Wife, husband, wife's fucker. Plus an alias for the husband who is pretending to be someone else for the fucker's benefit. How do you lose track of 3 characters and 4 names?

Proper English for a change.

Very hard to follow and it needs to be finished.

Hard to follow, but I still wanted to read more.