by tomlitilia
Very well built up. Loved slow start, it made it somehow real, or possible at least. So I wished I was there myself. Thank you!
I always enjoy finding a multi page tale. Usually the pacing is slower but the "climax" is just as satisfactory. The exhibitionism and domination are nicely balaned. I am glad that Monique actually got fucked. Will we see more, possibly out in the yard or at the beach?
I always enjoy finding a multi page tale. Usually the pacing is slower but the "climax" is just as satisfactory. The exhibitionism and domination are nicely balaned. I am glad that Monique actually got fucked. Will we see more, possibly out in the yard or at the beach?
I always enjoy finding a multi page tale. Usually the pacing is slower but the "climax" is just as satisfactory. The exhibitionism and domination are nicely balaned. I am glad that Monique actually got fucked. Will we see more, possibly out in the yard or at the beach?
Enjoyed this read, credible in it's own way.
Love to read a bit more of this
You have a nice style of erotic writing
Extremely hot. Just the right blend of exhibitionism, humiliation, and punishment.
Just wow! So well written. I loved the tone of the whole encounter.
There are a few spelling & grammar errors, while not major, if fixed would provide a final polish to a very fine story.
Thanks for a great effort.
I'm glad I found this gem thanks to the bulletin board. :) It's well written and kept me entertained. Great job!
Thank you for this and your other stories.
I am working my way through the single stories, before I start on the series ones.
Keep up the good work.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this as well as several others, I'm working my way through the singles then on to the multi parts.
Thank you for sharing,
Zeb
Thanks Zeb. This was one of my earliest stories, and I still think it has a lot of good elements. But I'm glad you could read past the mistakes :)
My wife and I have a beautiful French friend named Michelle, who is Monique's blonde twin -- curvy, lucious DD breasts and exceedingly alluring. She also is a dominating personality, even over my strong-willed wife. I, I am certain my wife, and I suspect Michelle would love to recreate your story. Let me go right now to book plane tickets to France.
I loved the story but struggled to get past all of the errors. I do have to say as a non writer I should not complain but working my way through your stories I do find to many mistakes sometimes making the reading of a story more difficult as I lose the flow. But thank you for your stories I do enjoy them. Mel B known as Hornydevil47