by Tanemund
Finally the pace of the story has picked up some. The handsome, hung, and horny rich guys at the party were described too often, the Shakespearean interchange was a bit long, and Madison's frustrations were dwelt on excessively, but at least something happened between Madison and Daniel that is leading somewhere. The man of mystery angle is overdone. After 22 dates she should know him and his motivations better than she evidently does. Are we to believe these two spend their dates discussing the coming weeks weather and the increase in the price of cocoa? Still, 4 stars for wordsmithing, a talent you have in abundance.