by Teenage Venus
You have a fantastic use of vocabulary. I would have loved to see more dialogue between the pair, but you covered that well with his inner thoughts and emotions.
Great job hon!! ;-)
I quite liked it your choice of words, and also the story and especially the end of it. Must say though I did lose interest for a bit towards the beginning of the second page, but still, very good.
written in a very erotic and seductive manner. I hate the word stygian but besides that, very well done. The knowledge of events and time period were astounding.