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Click here5 minutes later, Red said she was finished....... I tapped Bella on the top of her head and told her to get over there and eat her "Mothers Pussy!" Red crawled up on the bed, rolled onto her back and put her feet on the carpet getting comfy then pulling her legs up to her tits and held them there! Red looked at her daughter, then spoke to her like a parent punishing their off spring.... "Get your ass over here and eat my fucking pussy young lady! Bella Looked up at me, I motioned then told her to listen to her mommy so daddy has a good show! Bella crawled over into her mothers parted thighs, and with out hesitation, she dropped her face and began to kiss snd suckle her Mothers clit!
I looked up st the clock..... "damn, it was going on 2am, and i was so sexually hungry that i didn't want this to end! I watched as Red dug her nails into her daughters hair, pulling bella into her bald wet pussy! driving her daughters tongue with her messed up hair! rotating bellas head this way and that, pulling her daughters face up so only the tip of bellas tongue danced across her entire slit! "That's it baby, eat Mommys pussy snd give Daddy a good show!" "Yes, slowly...... suckle Mommys lips as if your were sucking Daddys cock!" "I want to squirt in your mouth and make you feed it Daddy!" "Do you love eating Mommys pussy for Daddy? Do you think you deserve to have Daddys dick burried inside of you while you eat My pussy?"
Bella shook her head yes while still attached to her Mothers clit! "Oh yes baby, Dont stop..... keep doing that, just like that...."OOOHHHHHH, Suck on my clit and finger fuck Mommy!" Mommy's gonna cum in your mouth, is that what you want?" Again, Bella shook her head yes..... and moaned in acceptance! "Harder, Finger fuck me harder..... suck on my lips harder!!!
Oh, Damn'it...... yes right there... dont stop,
Mommmmmmyyyyyyyys cuummmmmiinng... "AHHHHHHHHHHH FUUUUUUCK YESSSSSSSS, and with that Rose started squirting in her daughters mouth! "DONT TOU FUCKING SWALLOW THAT YOU LITTLE TARTED BITCH!!" Get your ass over there and give Daddy a drink!" Bella turned to me, her face covered with her mothers thick natural ejaculation, while holding a bubble of juices in her cheeks! Bella stood to her feet, I tilted my head back and openned my mouth like a baby bird waitingto be fed! Bella started to open her mouthly faucet as her others cum started pouring into my eagerly awaiting orific! Mommy clapper and cheered as I took her daughters givings and swallowed every salty desireable drop!
to be continued!
- COMMENTS
titaniumrodman644 months agoProofread, dictionary and though already mentioned, wtf is a braw? The typos in this story take away from how extremely good it could be.
Irishcreamer2210 months agoThe story was amazing. Short of lack of editing, this is one of my new favorites. I would love to hear more of the story. How the bar is a sex club, the story of the shots board etc. And if this becomes a regular thing for them or just a great night
mybikecruisesabout 1 year agoStoryline is awesome(as others have said); you do need to at least reread before posting. (How did Red become Rose in last para, etc.) You have a relaxed writing style, can develop this story and future chapters to be extremely exciting.
These characters have a lot to offer if developed a little more in additional chapters. How did Red and Bella get the pub and the 3 couples seemed like regulars to the point of almost a sex club by the innuendo you made of their actions when walked in; the drink chalkboard sharing, etc.
Each of these little lines needed to be built to better about the pub to fulfill the storyline as thick as you are trying to tell in your 1st chapter.
Thank you for you storyline. Keep up your hard work, it takes talent, and courage to put this much work into a story and post it. Many of the anonymous nay sayers have never written so much as the negative comments they give, much less the hard work you have done here. Take the positive comments of getting help to improve your solid work instead of the childish comments of how bad your work is before they completely read what you have done.
Lust4Sureabout 1 year agoAfter reading some of the comments I'm responding before the story. One, I was attracted by your stage name. Two, after these negative comments, I knew I had to read your fantasy. Now to the story!
not4longbyme@yahoo.com
Anonymousabout 1 year agoI must say that in my opinion, Sarkasmus is so right. I've stopped reading after about 3/4 of the first page. couldn't keep on reading with all the exclamation marks. sorry.
OverconfidentSarcasmabout 1 year ago@DeepDesiresForPlumpLadies - Word of advice: Don't.
If 87% of the comments under your story tell you that you screwed something up, it's probably not the readers' fault. There is nothing wrong with the perspective. The readers did not misunderstand or mispronounce anything. There simply is no reason to put an exclamation mark behind the info that someone takes a shower. Or that he takes off his work clothes after getting home from work. Or that he lits a cigarette. You simply used the wrong punctuation.
DeepDesiresForPlumpLadiesabout 1 year agoAuthorFirst, let me say thank you for all the good points, thank you for trying to point me in the right direction. But, you all should need to know that this is the very first time I’ve ever written anything like this. In writing it on an iPhone, didn’t really help!
In response to the grammar, I kind of understand where you guys are coming from, but it was all from the first person perspective with Full blown mixed emotions! I will definitely try to put it in a better perspective where the readers can fully understand.
Thank you again
tomar82403about 1 year ago...get an editor. Story was good - but, you must work on writing. While by no means terrible - it just needs some work. Try reading it aloud to yourself, you'll hear what we are talking about.
