by aidanthemaster789
Switching between tense is a little frustrating and distracting. Best to choose one and stick with it.
I liked this story very much. You have conveyed the arrogance and command of real power as well as the emotions of the slaves.
Some minor niggles; I agree about the tenses, best to stick to one (at a time anyway), and "letting out a hand" seems a little infelicitous, (how many hands has he got?), how about "he held out his hand".
I do hope you continue. I would love to read about Miranda's first night, and the intrigues of the concubines.