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by Kadhrogh

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Very nice

I enjoyed that, very sweet. Keep writing, I'll look forward to more!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Spellcheck

The only thing that kept me from giving this a 100 is the spelling.It just got kind of annoying

Chimney SweepChimney Sweepalmost 15 years ago
Good start.

It is a little stiff, your tense shifts a bit, and you get repetitive here and there. An editor can solve all that for you - they are invaluable. Damn fine start - keep up the good work!

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I'm a Dutch creative with a love for writing. In my spare time I write SF/Fantasy stories and Poetry. When I'm in the mood I write erotica, my count of stories uploaded to this site is just the one but there are some stories that could be ready to upload after some editing.