All Comments on 'A Day of Denial'

Hello NaughtyGeminiGirl96,

I loved your story, A Day of Denial. It really captured how Dom can take His sub to the edge and beyond over time. I cannot believe the sense of tension you captured in the subs thoughts as her Daddy took total control of her. I have been in the lifestyle for over 20 yrs now and you know of what you write.

MV

Good story but you really need to learn how to use commas correctly. You repeatedly don't use them when they are necessary (for example, after introductory clauses or phrases and after the first independent clause in a compound sentence) and sometimes use them when they should not be used producing comma splices and sentences that are just ungrammatical.

You could get the free version of Grammarly. That is pretty good with commas, but you still have to make a judgment call sometimes - and not just with commas. It's not AI by a long shot.

oh wow this was SO GOOD !!! i orgasmed twice just reading