by twistedworld
Loved this story and what an awesome ending! Rarely do I disagree with other readers, but I actually like the use of more 'proper' - 'formal' English on the part of the demon. Gives him an air of real sophistication. Really well done! Looking forward to more chapters! A very fun and enjoyable read!
PLEASE continue this story.
Just the right touch of humour.
Great story I loved the added twist on the end ... can't wait to hear her side of things.
this is a good story and a great first effort i really enjoyed not only the story but the idea as well. the only thing i would change is to make the language a little less proper so it flows a bit smoother