All Comments on 'A Dinner Party Stretches Her...'

Powerful! Mind-stretching and exquisitely written!

You need to keep your POV and tenses constant. You switch from third to first on the second page.

I did notice the tenses changing but there was little impact on the story which was most enjoyable, I look forward to another episode!

....utterly wicked and totally hot. Please continue this

I liked this story a lot. The description of the woman on the table and Julie's reactions made it seem as if I were in the room watching. I found the switching between first person and third person extremely distracting, almost as if Julie was having an out-of-body experience. While that could be an interesting plot device, it did not seem to be the intent, even though it was clear that Julie was identifying with Louise and imagining the sensations Louise experienced. I would love to read more about these characters or further explorations of Julie's sadistic and masochistic sides.

HOw about the part 2 of this story?

Thoroughly enjoyed that story, can’t wait for to read the follow up