All Comments on 'A Discovery in the Wardrobe'

Similar circumstances with my sister. Only we kept on going for years when we could steal a little time.

very good story. Suggest you continue this story, the possibilities are endless

Proof Reading Required.

Verb tense and appropriate clauses should be consistent within a paragraph.

Wonderful story, really embracing the innocence.

Well drat !

a short little tease and a good story ends.

Continue please.

Meh. It's just a jerk off story with no actual affection or deeper love between the siblings. Add on to the top of that that it is less than a full page in length and you have a recipe for extreme dissatisfaction from this reader. 3/5

Decent story. Not a lot of errors, and easy to read. However, IMO, it's a little short (which isn't all bad). However, I would have liked a better resolution to this story. Perhaps a better "cliff hanger" that leaves the reader wanting to read the next chapter (and yes, I do hope there is a 2nd part). Look forward to seeing where this might go.

nice- but you failed to mention if they cleaned up his jiz on the floor or not- is that something coming in chapter 2 ab0uty how they get caught or just an oversight

I enjoyed reading this as a start of things to come, I am going to read chapter two soon. Well written, well done, Those wanking while reading stories prefer slightly longer ones with more sexual details, but those enjoying how others write will enjoy this on that merit.

Whoa, NOT woah