All Comments on 'A Dom's Revenge Ch. 02'

Keep it coming for a few more chapters of the slut ex-wife finally getting what is due.

just kill her and be done with it. This isn't even hot.

was writing this boring awful wretched piece of crap he was thinking..." man this is a Good story..."

take no notice of the ones that dont understand the life style. well written and very descriptive, love the way you describe the cane and the marks it leaves. one of the best bd/sm stories ive read!!!!!

I have to take my observation back. This turns out to be some idiotic BDSM nonsense. There's nothing clever; it's even not about revenge any more. It is just a twisted little man, fictional man's, BDSM nonsense. <p>

I regret I said some thing about the story possibly being creative/original, with refreshing dialogues and plots. Instead, the author and his man (main) character demands nothing in the story but "Yes, Master." <p>

This is total childish, gibberish story telling.

If you think that this crap is somehow or somewhat representative for "the life style" (or any life style) you are beyond pathetic. Regards, Umberto

this is certainly not a Loving Wife story. It would be suitable under the Horror section.

Shouldn't this be in the BDSM category? Either way the story is well written and pretty interesting, but I do think it may be a little overdone. In the U.S. slavery is illegal and so is spousal abuse, so no signed document would held legal and with a single telephone call the husband would be arrested and the wife would more than likely would take the husband to the cleaners in the ensuing divorce and/or civil case.

because you have no idea what category this should be in.

The sadistic narrative reads more like a manual the wife might have picked in one of the book stores. It gave me no pleasure, in fact it was quite boring: the 'Yes master'; the chores; the whipping (of course). 'Dom' is a way to express yourself sexually. Binding the husband sexually and life style wise to his cheating wife in this way (even though she is the one who is physically being tied by those ropes) is therefore a revenge on HER how?

Why was this crap written in the first place? This is just a waste of storage space on the server

I gave up on this pile of shit after after about 3 paragraphs. Fantasy is one thing. psychotic horror is another. The most frightening thing is the few readers who thought this was a wonderful story. I hope yo can all find good psychiatrists to treat your illness.

the Ct. Yankee

<p>One: You have it in the wrong category</p>

<p>Two: There is something completely and totally <i>disturbingly</i> wrong with the main character in the story, the wife who is crawling back, any lawyer that will create such a one sided contract, and finally the author.</p>

<p>I mean where is the wife's family? Why are they still married after she walked out and told him she was leaving him for another man? Why didn't he get a divorce for abandonment after the first year she walked out? Knowing that while they are still legally married why wouldn't he have gotten a divorce ASAP when he knew she left him so that she didn't run up a huge debt and then stick him with paying it, since she could put down their former house as half of the debt and he couldn't do anything to stop her?</p>

<p>The lack of having these questions answered hurts the story. It makes it look like the only reason she came back was to be his private punching bag and his attorney is helping him do this. Something like that could get an attorney disbarred (or at least some rough sanctions) if it ever came to light.</p>

<p>I'm not trying to attack you directly, but this story is kinda disturbing, and it really should either <i>loosely</i> be in "BSDM" or (and I believe this is where it should be the most) "Erotic Horror". Putting it in Loving wives gives the reader the idea that while the husband's character may still be hurting by what the wife did to him, he has some semblance of mental balance that is absent of cruelty most folks wouldn't do to their pets. But this character really went off the rails here and is so far out in the yard you have no idea if he'll ever get back on the right tracks.</p>

<p>And its kinda creepy someone could ever do this to someone he had professed to have loved at one time. If he could do this to someone who he once loved, I'd hate to think of what he'd do to someone he never liked. To me there is a difference between hurt and having <i><b>Zero</b></i> moral conscious about any of his actions.</p>

-Risq

All civilized countries that I know of require WITNESSES for legal documents like the one he made her sign. The lawyer would never write up documents like the ones he supposedly did and accept them without being witnessed even if they were legal. And I don't think the lawyer would chance being part of a felony charge which could very well happen if she ever gets up the nerve to go to the police because the lawyer would be an accomplice to the illegal documents. To bad the author ruined a good concept with stupid errors and is probably not even familiar with that life style at all.

I was really hoping for a good revenge story on a cheating wife. The category may be debatable but the story itself is just 'bleh'. Though I'm not into the BDSM lifestyle nor profess to know everything about it, it was my impression that there was still some sort of caring involved between Master and slave.

I understand that her leaving him turned him into a different person, but it seems at this time that he's more bent on physically abusing her to exact his revenge.

Also, I agree with the other posters in (1) If he never divorced her, she could have easily come back to reclaim her portion of the home and use that to bail her out of her financial difficulties, (2) the docs she signed wouldn't have been legal without witnesses and (3) there could be consequences to David's attorney for drawing up such papers.

And I disagree with the poster that wrote "this is the best BDSM story" he's ever read. Perhaps it's the first and only BDSM story he's ever read?

So, anyway, I'm not totally bashing the story but, it could do with several major improvements. Hopefully it doesn't get worse before it gets better.

To the author, I hope you aren't discouraged by the reviews but instead perhaps you could have some friends or writing club or someone give you advice as to how to write a solid story.

dropping blew any possibleway to respect your ability as a writer due to the person you are. You are what you do - even here in fantasy land.<P>

When you spend time and talent on this disgusting, worthless subhuman abortive effort to cause pain and humiliation, you tell us what you are. This wasn't erotic and it sure wasn't arousing. The emotion it caused was anger for you and him plus sympathy for her - just the opposite of your intention.<P>

Whats further distrubing is you either didn't know that or worse it was your sole intention.<P>

This is sick shit by someone who needs help or to be treated as she was. You into that sicko??? When you were younger did you pull the legs off dogs or drown kittens??? Probably or not quite so bad but thats what you are selling with only the equally sick applauding. Grow up!<P>

You give BDSM a bad name - get help or begone - actually both.

This clown is not a DOM, he's a sadist. He hurts women to feel powerful and the only pleasure involved is his own. He should seek some serious psychiatric help before he kills someone. As for his unresolved issues towards his (ex)wife...get over it, she cheated on you and judging from your current actions, it was a good decision.

As a real life dom with many years of experience and as a divorced man I will speak with some realism. This is not BDSM it is out and out criminal. The contracts are of cource not legal, that said the wife submitted to the man. The acts described here would in the BDSM circles I have traveled in over the years in three states would cause the community to report the supposed "dom" to the the police. Yes some women like to be beat and even bloodied but in this case with no safe word, no way to speak it, and with her passing out in pain, and possibly permanent injuries, this guy is acting in a criminal manner. No sane man would stay married to a woman who left him as described in this story. To protect yourself you would immediately take steps to prevent her from being able to use your credit and you would begin divorce procedings. Contrary to the reconciliation at any cost group, there is no possibility of this couple ever coming back together as husband and wife unless the husband is totally mentally ill or insane, and one could take that stance reading the story. As a matter of fiction you can write anything you want, but to get the reader, the people you write for, to read it, some type or reality for fantasy must be touched. In this case, you are describing the thoughts of the insane and very few can really identify with that. A bit of experience in BDSM and a few sessions where groups share knowledge would help considerably.

You little faggot, you definite have some anger issues with women. Just take it up the ass and forget about it honey.

I agree with most comments; this story belongs in BDSM or Non-consent, or some other category but not loving wives. The main male character is one sick puppy. How macho of him to beat up his wife? She is a mess, mentally and physically ill; no, possibly she does not deserve his love again, but the justification for wasting his hate on her is pretty thin. He should have moved on a long time ago. Does he really think he has a free ride to be physically abusive? He belongs in jail for criminal acts towards a helpless individual coerced into so-called slavery. Even a pit bull has more morals than the husband. I really hope this is just fiction and not something the author really thinks is "OK."

nonsense. <p>

It's not BDSM; it's not Loving Wife (cheating, loving, revenge, etc.); and it's terrible and twisted 5th grade mindlessness. <p>

Reminds me of one other author who wrote about making his wife-to-be suck him off, once or twice a day, for some 15 chapters, each chapter having nothing in it but "suck me". But, not unlike this, I'm sure the author also thought he was being very clever in plotting and characterization. <p>

This one, the ubiquitous line would be: "Yes, master!" It's nothing but gibberish nonsense.

Only sick man will do some thing like this to a woman. I only saw two comments that they said they like it. I think it is you, Sirsemega, gave anonymous comments for your own writing. I have a same situation like this story. My cheating wife was crawling back, broke, overweight, homeless, etc. I was harsh on her but I don't kick people when they down. I gave her some respect but I never gave in while we were together. I never sleep with her. I just could trust her. I date other women and I also allowed her to date who ever she want while we were living in the same house. But she never did date anyone. For 3 years I had helped her on her feet. She has a stable job, money and looks better than the first time she came back. Then I asked her to move out since she was stable. And she did. I also asked her to sign divorces paper and she asked for a time to think. It took a year and three months when she came back to me with unsign paper. She told me she will not make the same mistake again. If she cannot have me she will not have anyone else. You know what sirsemega asshole. Now, I have the best wife I ever have. The best sex life I ever have. We only just make love, we also fuck. Damn I think we love each other more than we used to. Good is always better than evil.

written by a little schoolboy typing frantically with one hand, it is too bad to have been written by an adult

Just twisted,sick and evil. Exactly what you were trying to convey that she made you become ! You give her payback in the story and get negative comments ? Who's weak there ? I read the story from "non consent" and would have rated higher until I realized it was in the Loving Wives cat. also. THATS just wrong.

but then, if he didn't accept her back, there would be no story of her humiliation and degredation. i stop, and he wanted/needed this ? a better choice, even w/o the nonsense with her. better to send her off, but ...

As a female submissive, I quite enjoyed the first two chapters of this story. It doesn't make the writer inhuman to spin fictional stories about acts of explicit violence or rape, or even nonfiction stories depicting elaborate roleplay scenarios of such things. Pain is an accepted part of the lifestyle, don't forget the tail end of the definition of BDSM: Bondage/Discipline, Domination/submission, Sadism/Masochism.

I have difficulty understanding why a clearly identified BDSM story placed in the nonconsent/reluctance category is getting such conservative readers.

The grammatical errors and pacing inconsistencies are the only thing that keep me from rating this one 100.

It definitely beats all those cuckold/chastity stories that are out there. Kind of refreshing actually...

I really don't care for BDSM but this woman deserves this, she turned him into the man he is now just to gratify her sexual gratification and infatuation with some pretty boy. It would be nice if it works out but I am afraid she is in for a lot of pain before anything nice or good ever happens (and it might not). I don't remember the ending from when I read it last year or whenever it was.

When a woman takes her man, cuckolds him, locks him into chastity and generally treats him like shit. All the tree huggers and wanna be sissy cucks cream their jeans and say what a great story.

Now the boot is on the other foot they are all besides themselves with anger at the nasty bogey man.

Well fuck em. The cunt played and now it's time to pay the piper. I like this storey so Keep on going and break the bitch!

Anyone can do anything as long as they are willing to face the consequences. Now it's time for cheating slut wife to learn this simple truth.

Good story line so far. The fact that she isn't model gorgeous after living a raggedy life is a convincing element at this stage. As I read on, I hope that she is placed on a diet and workout to get her up to a sexier looking slave---something about beating sagging, blowsy women is hard to get excited about for me.

That said, as I have an exwife who was a philndering bitch, I can really identify.