All Comments on 'A Dozen Oysters'

Let me guess, Tom Cruise alter ego. Right?

Hot story! The images almost made me come.

You touched on some intriguing elements of a story, but never really followed through on any of them. His reaction -- going soft -- could have been dealt with in a lot greater depth, for example. And her interest turning into mere endurance is another aspect that could have been gone into a bit more. The psychology of something like this would be a good area to deal with; as they say, the brain is the largest sex organ. As it is, the biggest impression left at the end of the story is one of discomfort and unease, which is itself something worthy of exploration but was left unexplored.

I guess the first comment's reference is to "Eyes Wide Shut"? I don't really remember the plot anymore. :-)

It was also a bit hard to get into the story because of a few minor but consistent problems in punctuation and word use. Check up on how to punctuate and capitalize dialogue; remember the difference between "its" and "it's"; and use semicolons instead of commas in compound sentences where there is no conjunction.

Nice story, a good read! I like stuff like this. It's not unlike my own story "Mark & Demi Join Intimate Club". Well done!

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