All Comments on 'A Father's Justice Pt. 03'

All the hints are in the title. *****

Interesting chapter. The dvd was a great way of ending any speculation about them reconciling, but it's a shame Sarah still intends to support her mother. After finding out that Lisa was planning to pimp her out to the board, Sarah would be fully justified in completely disowning the evil bitch.

Lisa deserves to spend the rest of her life alone, disfigured from the gunshot wound, and in constant pain. She needs to suffer some real consequences for the appalling way she betrayed her loving family.

didn't elmer say h might meet some nice lady. hmmmm

Excitement galore!

5

with all the players names and statistics..TK U MLJ LV NV

For me another 5 star chapter. Can't wait to see where this goes.

I very MUCH want to jump to the last page to see how this tale ends. But the journey is so damned good. Thank you!

Excellent story. Five stars. I always enjoy reading your stories. A few things to consider.

1. If his phone was filled with spyware, so was Lisa’s. This could allow them to monitor conversations in and around the phone. Also, they would be able to track the phone, so they know he has it.

2. If they are doing due diligence then Sarah’s house is probably bugged. They have the resources to do this. Any conversations made there would be compromised.

3. He just had his house “rebuilt”, so there is a good chance that his house is bugged and anything he does is being monitored. Again anything he says or does could be monitored by them.

4. Any of the people he contacted (I.e. old friends) could be put under surveillance by the corporation.

In today’s electronic environment there is no privacy.

Moving along nicely.

Fantastic story! So far so good...5 Stars ★ ★ ★ ★ ★

Oh come on!

Enjoyed this chapter immensely. Plot gets thicker and juicer the further we move along. Thanks for the read. Keep up the great work!

Thanks for the reveal on Lisa's true character and involvement with all the shady deals and goings on. Death's too good of a fate for her...she needs to live a long painful miserable existence all alone by her self centered entitled self. Hope her daughter kicks her to the curb and cuts her out of her and little Ryan's life for good. I wouldn't let that piece of trash anywhere near my kid.

Hope old Ryan rains down wrath and destruction on all the big shots that think they're untouchable and sends then on an express elevator to Hell. Burn it all to the ground.

Intriguing story! Keep it up, am looking forward to the next chapter.

Great story and suspense! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Great story - keep up the good work and take your time, even though I'm dying to read the next part.

Unlike Chapter 2, which seemed like a placeholder, this one was good adventure.

Another 5*!

Looking forward to the next installment.

Well done, as usual.

Really, this Ryan guy must be missing a few brain cells. He is a complete moron.

Playing the tough guy and threatening/demanding that a surgeon hand him over material evidence in a shooting! The surgeon would have told him to fuck off and called the police on him.

He really was a half-witted mechanic who eventually became an average mercenary. Then every thing he did with Jorge was illegal. Including the statement taken without due process being followed. The recording by phone is inadmissable, Plus, the CEO hands over an incriminating DVD???? Ha Ha. Would never happen. Also his admitting he was responsible for putting Jake in a wheelchair. Really?

Sorry saddle but this is not your forte. Cheers

I want to mention that if the bad guys can hack his phone like they did they probably have Sarah and Bob's house wired as well. Looking forward to the rest of this tale.

5*.

Please post the next part soon.

Thanks

So many people to settle the score with. Looking forward to the next chapter.

all that's missing is BA, Face and Murdock. If no one else can help, and you can find them. You too can Hire the "A" Team

Deeply engrossed. 5*

I have to go back and see why he is even with his daughter after what she did to him. Just because he read the letters? And when the daughter called about his ex why go there? His daughter was fine and has "Bob" to take care of her. I would think good! Let the bitch die. Now that he see's that she was the whore she was for so long I am glad he isn't even visiting her and I was not surprised about the phone being bugged.

I hope part 4 is the last and I don't really care what happens to Jenkins. I want the ex wife to be crippled and the daughter to disown her.

Bad mistake. former Marine

Once a Marine always a Marine

Active duty done

Another excellently told sequel. Do you know what annoys me the most? I have to wait for the rest of the story. But I like to do it! Thanks for posting!

It is good but for the BIG MISS. Ryan took the battery out of his cellphone since he suspected it was bugged. Elmer knows of the recorded call, even has a transcript very soon.

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BUTTTTT Ryan does not remove the battery from Lisa's phone??? Sarah turns it on to access and Ryan never worried about Lisa's phone being bugged (that Lisa was being played too)??? They talk/plan/FBI in front of Lisa's phone?

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Ryan did not get Greg to check Lisa's phone for bugs too??? Is Ryan intentionally telegraphing everything he is doing/knows to the enemy via Lisa's possibly bugged phone? !@#$%^&* Hard to think Ryan would be that dumb!

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Well Bob seems to be a milk toast, buttttt I wonder since he works for the Commerce Department, maybe....

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Hard to believe Ryan hasn't got his Merc connections not ASAP looking for Colin Blackstone.

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Still a good yarn, just not getting posted quickly enough. Hooyah, salute!

More politics?

Well written. Thanks for writing.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing!

Bring on the next chapter quickly, please!!!

Dam you are good this is just showing how much a talented writer you are. But I still can’t believe you left it there again lol 😂. Again just when it was getting juicy I was getting all hooked and then you stop . You rotter 😂 just don’t you dare stop writing now . All I will say though I tip my hat to you on writing such superb stories you are truly a legend and can’t wait for the next instalment.

If you’ve read anything from Saddletramp, you should know things are going to get more outrageous and a healthy suspension of disbelief is needed. Once you go there, you can appreciate how skilled of a writer he is. I said it before, Saddletramp is like my 80s movie or action tv series fix. If you don’t take things too seriously, it’s a lot of fun. Very rarely, I don’t really enjoy his stories. And am flattered when he likes one of mine.

-HP

ST

You have more than enough stories under your belt so why the big F/U in this story? I know you're wondering what I'm writing about, here it is.

"Bob's already left for work," Sarah said as she put the food on the table. "After breakfast, I'll take little Ryan to my mom's then I'll head over to the hospital."

If she was taking him to her mothers then she would be taking him to the hospital with her.

Little F/U's can ruin a rather good story.

kind of went a bit racist there. old rednecks carry around ARs, i get enough of that stupid lawless crap from the news. dont worry I'm done

Well...so unexpected ("the depth of her depravity"...""I had no idea it was this bad, though," Ryan said). But now the truth comes out. So there is no reason, NOW, for Lisa to survive! But what is so concerning "...They will be coming after you and quite possibly your family. It's only a matter of time."...the war just started.

Damn it, man! Come on! I was really getting into it! Great story, I can't wait for the next part.

jneric

Definitely not one of your best and first to get less than 5 from me.

P1 really felt like reading a shopping list. Would have given up at that if it wasn't ST

But please you should know the difference between advice and advise.

Elmer gave adviCe.

Bob phoned his parents to adviSe them.

Seems Lisa got what she had coming. No confirmation what was in her texts.

Think it's about time for a board meeting with Lisa and a homemade tactical nuke. Go on ST you know you want to.

While I am finding the story interesting enough to continue to follow it, there are times when the conversations and the story information seem a bit too detailed and over the top. I generally like dialogue, but some of it was just a bit too much and irrelevant.

A global corporation that can make attempts on a wealthy Arab sheikh and the best they can do for an assassination in their own parking is a gangbanger wannabe loser who rolls over on them in about 10 seconds?

And then they invite someone they know is an experienced mercenary killer into their executive offices, hand over video evidence, spell out the details of their conspiracies and threaten him and his family without running a cellphone/bug jammer?

so over the top with clichés it's funny. But it's also fun and engaging when you let your disbelief take a break. Keep it up. Enjoying the hell out of it.

Like the way the story is moving. makes the wait worth while.

This chapter really upped the game from the first two, and those were not bad at all. I felt like I was reading a novel from a professional author. The tension was ramped up. I hope you bring it home to a three point landing.

You get my 5 for this one.

The plot is so complex that I can't remember all of the characters. Guess I will wait until it is all posted and then read the entire thing.

What a hook???? now I have to see if there was a hint about Beverly in the first two parts.

Can't wait......

I fell like a first cousin, you can sure make those liberals ears smoke .keep up the the good work enjoying the story ! Got you for a 4

Like the story, but I don't see a CEO making a Starbucks run.

"After breakfast, I'll take little Ryan to my mom's then I'll head over to the hospital." - I think that should be BOB'S mom! I see my friend Dmann caught that one also!

If they cloned his phone, won't they have the call he made to Bill from Elmer's office? Maybe they hadn't checked it yet?

Not as blatant as MarlboroMan, but could have done without the politics.

@Powersworder, I don't know how much she intends to actually "support" her mother.

@Warlock18, I was thinking about Lisa's phone as well.

@KRD1954, it's at least POSSIBLE that the hacker deleted the file before Elmer's people had a chance to check it. But I do agree about Lisa's phone.

I KNOW THIS IS FICTION, BUT NOT COMPLETELY FAR-FETCHED. LISA, BECAUSE OF HER SLUTTY LIFESTYLE, WILL NEVER HOLD HER GRANDSON AND KNOW WHAT FAMILY IS... WHEN SHE NEEDS IT MOST.. RYAN MAY FALL IN LOVE AGAIN, WITH THE WIDOWU..

Can't wait to read more of this wonderful story.

Wrap it up”

Hands down, one of the best stories I've ever run across on here. Keep 'em coming, please!

Reread the series after my last comment.....

I wonder what Knight Petroleum did to Beverly????

Not absolutely sure, but I have met about 10 FBI agents for several different reasons and, to a person, each called him/herself Special Agent. Those still in training MAY be labelled as Agent, but I doubt those are assigned as contact personnel.

One of ST56’s better tales.

Ignore the critics.

more more more

Part 4 has been submitted and is awaiting publication and part 5 is on the way. There will be a part 6. Stay tuned, and thanks for the positive comments/emails! They are much appreciated.

Thanks, Saddletramp for the heads-up about the next instalments....this is proving to be a great series. Cheers!!!!

This a generally good story that is well-written, and without typos. It is frustrating, therefore, that the story has so many internal inconsistencies.

The story of Lisa and Jack was understandable, but, given Jake's nature, it is impossible to conceive that he would have ever walked into an alley to meet a cuckolded husband without bodyguards close by. Karate would not stop a bullet.

Next, the Lisa story is inconsistent. On the one hand, the story leads one to believe that Lisa genuinely feels sorry for Ryan and want to help him, and, in fact, in Part 2 we share Lisa's mindset -- "Part 2: “"Any time," she said, giving him a hug. She was surprised that he hugged her back the way he always used to. She got in her car, a tear falling down her cheek. How could I have been so stupid and selfish, she thought to herself.” But, then Lisa gives him a phone that she had to know had been loaded with spyware in order to determine how Ryan acquired the incriminating materials against Jake. She told Ryan " I got you one. It's the latest with all the features. You can send texts, emails, take pictures, video, whatever you want. I've already got it set up with your area code and programmed it with my number, along with Bob's and Sarah's." The two parts are inconsistent.

Now, we are told that Lisa was a company whore. But, if that was the case, why would Jake have married Lisa. Why would someone in Jake's position ever marry the company whore? It makes no sense.

Finally, it is utterly preposterous to have Elmer basically admit to Ryan that the company had ordered a hit on Lisa in a gentlemen's agreement with Jake, and to do so without checking Ryan for bugs.

Maybe some of these internal inconsistencies can be reconciled in future parts, but, for now, the story leaves me utterly frustrated that an otherwise good and promising story is being internally sabotaged by inconsistencies and stupidities.

I agree with the comments praising this story and i may just one of your best.

I would offer one piece of advice (not advise); if you were to review it for spelling and grammar you could improve its readability.

Thanks for a really great story.

The plot thickens 5 stars!

SADDLETRAMP1956 .... Deranged Conspiratorial ignorant ineducated retard that supports trump

I was very excited that this popped up today in the new section. Can't wait for the rest!

I love it!! Thanks for sharing.

That's all he ever does. I swear, he must be the commanding officer of the Perpetual Bitch Brigade. Get a life, willya? It's a story. It's fake. It isn't real. Get it? If you don't like it, move on. But then, you wouldn't have anything left to do, would you?

@Harryin Va , I'm pretty sure name calling went away when I left the second grade. They must not teach manners in VA. Have a great rest of your miserable life.

I didn't enjoy the plot of 1 and 2 all that much but this came as a surprise.

Lisa was taking down a notch which was very much needed

liked the nice little conspiracy story brewing

a new budding romance coming up at the end too

Great story. Waiting inpatiently for the next chapter

Good story and I am still with you about to read part 4 and will be looking forward to parts 5, 6 and beyond(?). Wish the nit pickers would cease. If they don't like the story there are hundreds of thousands of other posts here to enjoy or other sites even. As you clearly point out this is your universe.

5 stars and headed to chapter 4.

Keep them coming

Cheers

SAGE

Sometimes (like now), the comments are at least as entertaining as the story. This batch of comments include accolades from Mr. Anony and an identified Hairy Virginian doing the opinionated tear down. I conclude Hairy is a never-Trumpette. To each his own opinion...

Keep 'em comin'.

Only critique Bob said his dad was once a marine. Once a Marine always a marine hoo haa

Goes to the trouble of getting his phone de-bugged , yet takes Lisa’s phone with him without getting it de-bugged!?!?!?

Did not clean wife's phone. Sees wife in gangbang and dissing him. Does not get mad, does not scream out at his wife. Dude has no heart or soul. This story just meanders along like a 14 year old wrote it.

Great as usual. Hoping for more revenge in the next chapter.

I agree partly about Lisa's phone. I think it would have been in FBI custody or with local police.

The lack of screams at her actions makes sense to me. He's got Sarah to be strong for plus he's possibly numb certainty trained to get passed emotions. The FBI needs that video. The cut off before Lisa agrees or refuses to get Sarah involved invites speculation.

Did they honestly think Sarah would take being raped without a complaint?

I’m kind of surprised about Ryan’s hacker. He deleted everything off the server and phone, but why not keep copies for Ryan?

But still enjoying it.

I am glad Beverley showed up. Since no other women had been introduced, I was afraid the head wound would give Lisa amnesia to before her betrayal of Ryan and lead to a RAAC. While I don't oppose RAAC as a concept, turning Sarah against her father for a payday is a bridge to far. Looking forward to reading the next part.

TayJK

tayjk42 at gmail dot com

What a cum dumpster Lisa is , great story.next chapter please

Ugh! I was hoping for a whole lot of action in this chapter. I liked the some of the realizations made in this part. Except Lisa being a dirty little gangbang slut. And I'm really confused as to why Jake would have even marry the cum covered whore. Hopefully it will make more sense in the next chapter.

advise

advice

When the going gets tough...

This story is like the gift that keeps on giving. Really enjoying it . . . Great job, Author!

Garbage cuck shit. Strong man to straw man.

With every new part, the protagonist starts to feel gradually weaker as a person. Not only did his whoring ex-wife make his supposed big anger, hatred, or whatever he claimed to feel, evaporate in about a minute after they've met, but the protagonist also keeps going home from the hot spot where the stuff is going on. Why? So the next scene can start with him taking a plane back becuase somehting happened. Now he's going home again even knowing that his daughter and grandson are targets. Oil guys like the ones he confronts aren't limited to random gangsters but will have government connections, too. The protectors from the FBI or whatever might as well be killers in plain sight.

Also, why would that Elmer guy share that porn stuff about Lisa? Gloating is such a weak reason. That stuff is perfect blackmail material to damage the reputation of everyone involved. If I were a gangster boss or so, I would suggest to Elmer he should visit a doc to check out his brain for damage.

I'm loving the story. I can always count on ST56 to give a good story with a lot of detail and plot twists to keep the reader involved. I know the DVD had to hurt both him and his daughter seeing it happen, even if it was 10 years ago, but that doesn't stop the hurt. Learning about Elmer was a new revelation, in that he'd been involved from the beginning, and going after his family is a bad idea, especially his grandson and daughter.

I gave it 5 stars.

Still a good old cops and robbers story so far

Enters the egg lady

Got me interested now, lots of twists and turns. Guess Lisa was or is a party girl, DVDs and all, lol.

Excellent! Loved it to pieces. Thanks! 6 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

Captivating

So let me get this right. A billionaire who thinks a mechanic is below him and wants to cuckold him actually marries the company prostitute, who he's seen having sex with the whole board, and has no guarantee that he himself won't be cucked, seeing as she's the company whore. Yeah that makes sense.

Echoing the comment below ... so we have a cuck who married a gold digging whore who then goes on to show pity to, and get into a relationship with, someone that's well past the age to be expected to be able to independently function economically. Makes about as much sense as the wife whose behaviour the author has trickle truthed in order to play with the readers emotions.

Can't help but feel that everyone in this tale is a complete human toilet.

Back for more! Thanks ST, love your work. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS again!

Why did he take her phone with him? His phone had been hacked and cloned and had voice recorders and trackers on it. Surely the phone belonging to the company prostitute would also have had the same treatment.

This chapter has been quite interesting. Just when I thought that the wife wasn't too bad, you throw us fir a loop. I really hope she gets confronted about the MC's phone and that video.

MUCH MUCH improved. Still one use of a trope that should be dumped. His daughter finds our dear old mom his an epic whore who was on board giving her to the board as well. She was properly outraged then turns right around and says she'll look after dear old mom. COME ON! Her real desire would be to kill the bitch, failing that, leave her to rot.

Still, ST writes fantastic stories 👏

The saga continues. Thanks for your writing.