by vandavontiessen
Definatly want to read more. A nice change for the story not to be about domination but more about discovery
Your story is very entertaining and feels very real. It was a good read. I have to agree that if you intend to continue writing in English, iot would be great to ask someone to proofread and edit. That said, please continue writing :)
not a bad story at all
but very obvious that English isn't your first language. Hard to follow some of it, you might want to find someone to edit for you before posting?
You're right, however I had one.
but very obvious that English isn't your first language. Hard to follow some of it, you might want to find someone to edit for you before posting?