All Comments on 'A First Kiss'

That was the most Incredible piece of a story i have read.

Pat .

For a short story I found this to be powerfully erotic. I was breathless - carried along with the girls excitement. Thank you for this story. X

This is a nice little erotic story spoiled by one thing. About half-way through the tale, and half-way through a paragraph, you switched tenses from the past tense to the present. It doesn't matter which tense you use for a story (although I prefer the past tense), keep it consistent all the way through.

You should come out with a nother one

I love how you describe all the sensations of main character.