All Comments on 'A Journey Out Of The Orthodoxy 01'

This being your first story, the effort was commendable. But I would like to point out a few things which in my opinion were lacking.

1. Describe the scene, the environment in detail which will enhance the reading experience. Describe the sex scenes in detail, especially.

2. Your editing skills need to improve. One mistake here and there is acceptable but in this case, you have not just swallowed alphabets but in some instances, the whole words. No one wants to keep guessing what word was supposed to be there.

All in all...decent story. Hope to read more about Asha's experience with Sanjay and perhaps a foursome. Cheers!

what about your wife sex part?

liked that, would have like to read more, but that was good

It is very enjoyable,but please write about what happened between the other pair as well.

gey all, thanx for your comments and encouragement.. The next part is coming soon...

would love having a couple friend like this having a bunglow outside city limits.

waiting to be approached with my hubby krishh.AND FURTHER PARTS TOO

rinakrishna3@yahoo.co.in

:-)

Excellent and good narration, but the story would have more spice if the sex would have been a 4 some with all the participants in same bed

Thanks for sharing this story. The premise was developed with care. It was almost realistic reading about swinging in India.