All Comments on 'A Knight in Shining Armour'

I feel you start your story 1/3 into the movie. There is no who, what, or why... Describing that would go a long way to having this a much better read.

I had a former writing professor best explain this to her student by having them read their piece/story aloud (and even as far as taping it and re-listening to themselves). So you then "hear" and "see" what a reader is going to read. When it doesn't make sense - you need to alter the approach. The story is fine - it's your approach, which characteristically is the determination of the reader to read on or bail. Basically, you need to set the scene better.

Wow,loved it