All Comments on 'A Knock at My Door'

It doesn't sound like he is all that happy!

5

5 stars, nice one!!

That was a good btb. 5stars

After 4 years he should be dating again; maybe even found someone. Also, since she gave him everything the house is his - he can call the cops and have her arrested for trespassing. Lastly, you have to wonder what happened to her to cause her to come back; also chances are their parents are still alive - what will they say? Seems like she made a bad decision and has a severe case of regret - one that she will have to deal with for the rest of her life. I wonder if her sons will ever want to communicate with her again; which could be interesting when they get married and have their own families. I can see them talking to their girlfriends/fiance "Sorry dear, but my Mother is a cheating slut that left my father. I consider her dead and will having nothing to do with her ever again."

That's some nerve.

Showing up at his door after 4 years is one thing. All of her bags in hand saying she's home ... SMH

Needs a second chapter

part 2?

A good quicky. Well done.

No. It doesn't need another Chapter. It ended where it should have done.

This made me smile, however, I agree that while it doesn't need it, the story is ripe for a part 2.

Thanks for writing it :)

First part was really straight forward, so I didn’t see the ending coming with a bang. I’d like see see more but maybe it truly ends there. 4.3*

Good one. I agree, it needs a chapter 2.

Okay, but then what? D

I know this could stand alone. However, like others it does seem like there is more to tell. It's 4 years and he has done nothing about finding another partner? Did he organise a divorce? Maybe part 2 telling her story? Still a good 4 stars.

There is the very definition of entitled. It ain't pretty. Good job.

Good for him. Now he needs to stop punishing himself get out of the house and find a better woman. They are out there.

Liked it. 5 Stars.

I also thought this was well done, but I'm also curious what he's done to move forward on his life, WITHOUT the over-entitled woman who treated him so badly...

...but it is 5-star worthy, IMHO.

Nicely done. I think it's a nice complete story as is. But it would make a good starting point for all kinds of extra detail. Maybe he did something to screw with the happy couple that led ian to dump her, for example. Anyway I liked it.

If the wife is portrayed in this incredibly silly fashion, the story loses any real positive bent.

Someone walks out on you, they usually just go. And stay gone. These silly creatures with a brain the size of a pea and their wives just seem really boring. OF COURSE she left him. I'd leave him. He seems incredibly one-dimensional (husband-victim): perfect in every way).

Can you give the MC something more than a boilerplate rendering of "midwest white guy"? because, man, if this is the depth of these people's thinking and living, it's no surprise that they need to go back to the 1950s, their brains can't handle complex ideas or issues.

Too bad he didn't piss on her face!

Now for a short story, this was excellent. Not even thinking of listening to her bullshit about why she is returning or why she expects him to welcome her back. 5 stars

Hubby’s response was great. Good little flash story. The ex will have to find another sap.

oh yeah i think we all know why she is back lol guy dumped her for a younger model. no one want to be an old lonely apartment lady lol so she came back

You reap what you sow.

thinking it would ok to just walk back into his life like nothing happened, just a crazy lady

I would have to agree there is more to the story that needs to be told

Geat story, but it needs part two. 5 stars. The Bear approves. more, please.

The BEAR

Very nicely done 5

Excellent!

A very well handled situation I would say. Did she really think she could walk right back in after 4 years like nothing had happened??

It would have been more fun if the new gf/ wife called out “Who's at the door honey?”

“Nobody I know.”

Short and sweet, loved it!

WOW Perfect BTB LOL Perfect! 10 stars to the writer. "Do I know you?" LOL hahaha that would be so hard to do, to find the person that you loved and trusted that just suddenly wanted to come home after fucking another person for several years. They thinking that they could just come home anytime the other relationship failed. LOL Cold hearted Hubby tells her, I don't even know you. LOL What a perfect burn! Great writing and story. Buster2U

It gave me a grim chuckle. Thank you

Loved it, RG! Great BTB!

Good emotional hit of a loving wife story. Short and to the point. Thanks for sharing.

Pare it down to the core.

4*. Minus 1 for inconsistency with their/his socioeconomic status.

Also, hard to imagine that, after 4 years, she would not stay in the British Isles.

Too short but well done.

Quick and straight to the point. Excellent husbands reaction.

Good story but a little more about the shrew on his doorstep and what he had been doing and was doing for 4 years would have been interesting.

Liked the story alot, just wished it was fleshed out more. You definitely had the pieces in place to continue; maybe a part 2 of what happened to wife while away. And then for her to find out her ex-husband has another love interest. Thx Regguy69! 5*

Finish the damn story… sigh.

Now that’s how you treat shit that lands up on your doorstep, you certainly don’t invite it in.

Must admit a part two might be amusing.

She's got some nerve, I'll give her that!

Why would she return believing she could just walk back into his life?

Why would she be “screeching” at the door?

Why would she think she was welcome or that he even wanted her back. It’s been 4 fucking years, there is no way she would come back unannounced.

If you love sum one set them free, if they return it means no one wanted them.

Fockin‘ perfect!!!

That’s the right answer to a braindead cunt. Returns after the last best years, used, streched and dry aged to oh so trusting fool to have her menopause time in tranquility and safety, without to use her putrid cunt again. Right?! Wrong!!! Not gonna happen, SLUT!!!

Five, thumbs up.

Captcha

An appropriate ending. She dumped him and her children, what else could be expected.

Talk about entitlement, or what?

He dealt with her appropriately, and left her outside.

She should have been more careful concerning her wishes.

She wanted out, and got what she wanted.

Now he's getting what he deserves: the last laugh.

Pt2

Again, a couple of childish immature persons: when the self-centered behaviour is joined by a lack of empathy, the inability of understand the feelings and the needings of the partner, the inability to communicate on an emotional level, then the relationship become cold and slowly degenerate to the level of no-return. Even with a likely coming divorce, a deep confrontation should have been made, but these ones were not mature adults enough, and so the ugly consequences for them and their family, were inevitable. This story lacks the educative part about the mistakes made and how the bad ending could have been avoided.

Great story. Leave it there. I usually hate when a story hangs, but you nailed it.

This needs another chapter .

Really good, short but good.

Great start. I can only imagine what kind of mischief could be coming down. Nuclear??

The only part 2 story is what happens to the Karen after the door slams in her face. Otherwise, perfect ending.

Ahhh, take her in and fuck the schizznit outta that cheating slut, buy some bdsm kit and go to town

His new wife opened the door and see what happens. Good story but like some other comments. What did her parents/siblings think about what she did.

Ahhh. A quick little tale of "buyer's remorse". Nicely done.

The grass on the other side of the fence may appear greener, till you take a closer look.

Good for him.

Good ending. Like the other comments said, it could easily have a part 2, but doesn't need it. She can dictate leaving, but not coming back. A huge ego check.

A shorty is harder to craft than a Novel.

This is perfectly crafted, well done.

She had steel balls the size of basketballs but he had strength. Nicely done.

I know you warned us it would be short. I just wasn't expecting that short. Still a good story and covered all the bases.

Okay, I think I understand what happened here. You figured you came up with a clever line and decided that, since literotica publishes everything, you’d take five minutes to throw something together to get some pats on the back from the LW bottom feeders. Gotcha.

Now that's balls! Oh, the different places you could go with this is mind boggling.

Well done. Fuck the unfaithful slut...

Was like a tv news bulletin: “More after the break but now the latest and greatest shoe ever worn can now be yours for only $59.95 at Marbles Department Store”.

Great finish. Right to the point.

Agree with ScorpioJJ — the MC needs to start living life again. The impression tne story left was that he was wallowing too long and deep in his sadness. Unfortunately the story didn’t even hint at whether he had much involvement with his kids…or for that matter, if the slut had ANY with them.

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4 ****

is this considered a story?

"I have always been on the quiet side, so it's no stretch to believe she thought I was boring." - If that bothered her so much, why did she marry him?

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"We've fallen in love" - This is so old. You feel an attraction. You act on it, you share intimate moments, inside jokes, little touches, THEN you fall in love. The "trick" is to NOT act on the initial attraction, transfer, change jobs, quit if you have to.

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Put me in the camp that needs more. I'm not 100% on board that he's got no life. Yes, it seems that way when he says he's boring, but maybe he has a new love that loves him in spite of that, who doesn't need excitement all the time.

More please.

Perfect. Less is more.

Would have been great if he'd have called his live in girlfriend in to help get her out of the door.

Just about perfect. If the mc would have called his pregnant, young live in girlfriend to help sort out the situation it would have been perfect.

I don't mind the ending at all. I also don't think he needed to have gone out and find a new wife. Hell, I have lots of divorced friends that are very happy not having a new wife. HOWEVER - They are not couch potato guys either. They do date, they are members of other clubs and such so they are not bored. There is a difference between being alone and being lonely.

It would have been better if it did not read like the guy is a lonely loser. Just have him be single and so what if he happens to be spending a night in. Don't make it like that is the only routine he has.

Well. 4*

Stupid bitch, but husband was also pretty pathetic. Nothing much here to enjoy.

Have to disagree with one of the comments. They always come back if they find out the grass isn’t really greener. They are selfish enough to think they deserve better and don’t care about the damage in their wake as they dump everyone who cares for them. If things go south in the future, they are narcissistic enough to think they can just back and all will be forgotten and forgiven.

She should have negotiated a Return Policy in her divorce papers. Maybe even a Carfax on how many more miles were on her used twat, might have helped.

Good story, thought the ending was weak. Thanks for writing.

British betas can't hold onto their women. And the woman are all slags anyway, so this sounds fairly legit. This young lawyer found a woman with decent teeth and knew how to do something other than be a cum dumpster for a living, and he moved on. Big shock.

What a sad boring cock, I'm surprised he didn't go down the gym and start sucking guys off. Nope, just sat at home being dull and boring watching mindless films and being bitter and sexless like the eunuch he obviously is.

Interesting how in the last hundreds stories, in this LW category, almost only the BTB tales got to reach the 4+ stars. It seems like there is a little war between the Femdom-crew, with the fetish-cuck theme, and the BTB-team, with the revenge-payback theme. Even though the Cuck theme is published in proportion of about 15 to 1, against the BTB theme, the latter wins by far, letting the former in the lowest range 2.5-3.5*. And then there are a few stories in the middle, but the daily battle appears to be Cuck vs BTB. Interesting.

Good story, I like his style

Short and awesome. 5*

The story is missing the tension needed to be complete imo.

Evidently, in addition to the "Martian Slut Ray," there has been another ray lurking in the shadows. It's the "Martian Lazy Ray." Unlike the slut ray that attacks loving wives, the lazy ray attacks those who tell their stories. Take this story for example; here we have an excellent base for a good story but instead of taking the time to flesh it out and give us such a story, he chooses to cut out the most meaningful aspects of it and give us a brief scenario because he's too lazy to write it.

Nope. That’s plenty.

Yes, may we have some more please? What what has Julie been up to? Why, after four years did she leave the scumbag Ian Rogers? Why come back to her old home and ex-husband? Enquiring minds want to know!

Nothing more is necessary. The story ended four years ago. The scene at the door is simply the epilog. Loved it.

Ed

There’s a fine line between dignity and stupidity. And our protagonist didn’t cross that line.

Too bad 2 little kids and his wife from his new family weren’t there to greet her.

LOL@CrazyDaveTrucker60! That was the piece I was looking for.

No need at all for a followup, the story and the marriage is already dead, unless someone needs a big unbelievable RAAC. So, this was a good pacific and definitive ending, but there is certainly space for more, and longer, plots on the same balanced line.

Another technique story, spliced onto the clueless cuck plot device. Good thing you kept it short, because there was a little bit to see and hear, and almost Nothing to think about. Martian Slut Ray, pure and simple. And another shallow tepid distant marriage into the dumpster, where they all belong. After 4 years this slob is still single, not even dating or in love with a decent intelligent woman? Oh, right, this drub has nothing to offer an intelligent woman. No wonder the whore thought she could just waltz back in to the dumb ass's life.

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Kind of an interesting vignette. Maybe you could write a story about it one day? That would be so considerate. Thanks for the sample taste. Needs some spice.

Not only no but Hell NO!

HAHAHAHA!!!