All Comments on 'A Mother's Love'

Beautiful story! It needs some significant editing -- especially the many misgendered pronouns (his vs. her). But your writing is quite lovely.

Totally agree with ddbird.

it was a little hard to follow with all the misgenders but quite a good story

"baby, love me with all you have, love me with care of mother I am" - ???? You badly need an editor.

Couldn"tfinishthix. As mentionned by dbbird, it was si,ply too frustrating to read.

I did give this a four ( 4 ) however due to your creativity with a story line I had not seen AND how well you told the story . . . As far as I could read, save for the pronoun abuse.

Te yourself reading this, then play the tape while reading along.

Oh yes, don't feel weak by sourcing an editor.

Not much of a story and so many mistakes made it hard too read 3 stars

You used the word frail so much it sounded like she was 80. You could have a better description of her body and described brief moments of when he turned 18 and she saw him standing in the tub fully erect. It awakened her desire for him as a man and of course she gets a bit wet She masturbates with that image for the 8 years that have passed. In anticipation. She could have gone braless. You need to build the campfire

So what if it is 'hard to read' etc etc.

All us anons, and other 'submissionless' members, how can we criticise a new author so harshly if none of us have ever submitted anything on this site?

Some say 'too short", 'no character building', 'need an editor", and so forth.

I say, thank you for you effort, if I had received even half of the love that you described here, I would gladly shed this mortal coil, and welcome the evening of my life!

Closing his eyes, John pushed deeper inside his mother. She gasped and moaned, "Oh John, your cock is so big...fuck me harder, oh yes...faster, oh John...fuck me John, fuck your mother, oh god, oh god, oh god, you're going to make me CUM!"

I gave it a 3.5

I also didn't like the repleted term frail. How old was she? I would love to have seen some build up to them making love.

Liked the story but there wasn't much sex and it was too short 4 stars

Well written and interesting but the frail thing got me - she sounds near death, not the mother of a 26 year old.