All Comments on 'A Nasty Tale'

Wild story all around!

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Twisted...

but well-written twisted. Kudos on keeping the interest up until the end.

Now, the sequel will play out; does he or doesn't he give her a continuing "chance to make it up to him"?

I vote yes. Hell yes!

More please.

Wow. Just when you think these stories can't get any worse one like this pops up. I guess the sign on the office door is right, "you can't fix stupid."

Did he believe that she'd been celibate for 18 months? Nah. D

I really liked it. Four stars

Flushed the guy's junk. Ouch!

He's right about her not saying she was sorry despite her apparently taking complete responsibility for her actions. The other thing for me was that she claims it was just a bit of fun that went too far. They were at the pub, she knew her husband was going to be an hour late getting there and she intentionally left the pub with Gerald and took him to their house. Too much intent and planning to claim it was just something spontaneous that happened.

Good he has no qualms to shag the ex-wife.

Brave of him.

I know I can't.

Eww.

Wait…she said that she made a mistake..-and she said it repeatedly! If that’s not another definition of saying I am sorry then I got my English wrong! So this test of a writer wants to play on a word Sorry…to forgive her! Ma’an that really shit the story for me ..it wa a good till then!

Fiona's sentence wasn't credible. Entertaining and cringe-worthy. 5

"Fiona got a suspended sentence for illegally disposing of human body parts or some such thing." - Yes, but what did she get for cutting them off? He got three years, served 18 months for just tying Gerald up, surely she got more than a suspended sentence for what she did?

Lovely and sweet story every cheated husband must read as part of his healing therapy. With stories like this, who needs a counselor. Thanks for the story, and if you keep writing, we will keep reading.

That's a beautiful story

Toooooooo much.

LOVE slap-hapy-papy. #9

Ugh - 3*

Truly entertaining. Made me laugh out loud.

Ed

Story was good, but grammar was shit. gaol? or jail? Not the only mistake. I hate being that guy, but that lack of attention to detail is hard to ignore. I have plenty of typos, but g is 2 spaces away from j, and o is close to i, but damn. Story started off wrong from he start.

Just to be clear, I read the whole thing and liked it. Just being a dick about little things, I guess.

Simply awful.

At least I had a good laugh when I read your story. Thanks for that!

Pretty average in both story and content. 3*.

Strange tale but it didn't get me interested enough to care about any of the characters. It sounded like a dead cat story in that you can guess most of the coming attractions from the onset of the tale.

The story lacked depth and other details but can't expect much of that from only 2 pages. The cheating slut didn't get much burn here though and how come the other wife didn't get jail time?

Ah, take her with, better the hoe you know… haa haa. And her showing up dressed like that is a fair apologetic proposition

Another technique story. Lots of detail and description of what he did and how he did it, but almost nothing about his marriage, his wife's character and personality, and most importantly, the details of her seduction. If the whore was rehabilitated cheating on him, why should he give up a renovated woman to another man? He got the betrayal and the pain, and the new man got the now loyal and loving pussy. She forgot to say she was sorry? OK, if his ex wife was that cheap and easy to replace then I could see him trying out an unspoiled woman. I thought maybe she had been a special friend and partner at one time, and might be worth salvaging. Cute description of the revenge. Disappointing omission of the relationship and human interest issues. But thanks for the effort.

Fucking laughed my ass off.

Funny, I like this. For some reason most BTB authors are afraid of blood and even more afraid of jail. And yet many men do go for that exactly including beating the cheating female. So this is a nice departure from typical LW stereotypes, with some humor.

... it's ai'ght. Not much else to say.

To the Anonymous comments. Jail v Goal. Jail is American and Goal is British, although they are interchangeable in the UK and Australia and I am guessing NZ as well. I am British guess which one I used.

To those who say there was no character development, you'e correct. You are not supposed to like these people. They are pond life scum.

I have a couple of longer stories with a lot of character development, one for LW and one for Rom plus a few more BTB shorted stories.

For those who wondered what happened to them, did they stay together or split up? Make your own ending that you like.

LJA644

u should try not writing in phrases unless its in dialog. i dont think i have ever been that mad before put i would think he would have some sort of PSD seeing a man's dick shoot across a room. would make me at least think twice about fucking my ex wife for sure

Anonymous about 3 hours ago

Another technique story. they said it best

Only because the other guy got what he deserved

A proper title for this life changing story.

Amusing in a macabre sorta way.

"I know I was wrong, it was my mistake. What must I do to get back into your life? I have been celibate for the last 18 months since that day, I don't want anybody else, I only want you. I know it's not going to be easy for you to forgive me, I'm not sure if you can. But I won't cock up again, once bitten twice shy, I'm not going to risk losing you again. I'm not likely to make the same mistake twice. Can we make a go of it please? Can we at least try?" 

"It would have helped me make a decision in your favour if you had said you were sorry." 

The word "sorry" was not uttered but it was damned sure stated in the apology and penance. You were doing so good until that point.

Um

Typical western judicial system... the man ALWAYS gets the shaft.

I wish we could go back to the wild west rules of law. Where truth often won out by the speed of the draw, but we didn't have the sniveling twats to deal with.

blah blah blah a cure for insomnia

He got the shaft, but Fiona is my hero. She’s a cut above the other characters.

I liked this a lot. You have good writing form and the story flowed well. Only 3 stories, it's amazing really. You have done well.

⭐ ⭐ ⭐

THAT was awesome! Once a woman cheats on you, the chances of her repeating are probably 75%. Free pussy is free pussy, but don’t let her back into your heart. Once she figures out you aren’t “ re- committing” , the pussy supply will dry up. Hit it, then quit it.

I thought for a moment that you were going to have him get back with her. Lying to her about where he was going was a nice touch.

Translating from British to english can be a pain, but you did a good job. Not all terms are universal.

Oh the fucking irony. “Translating from British to English can be a pain.

a good story. Please write a story where the wife tells her husband she wants a weekend away with another man and that if he loved her, he would allow it. He finds her intended paramour is her co worker. The husband walks into the office the next day, sees the guy standing over his wife and loudly asks "are you the one who is planning on fucking my wife?" Well, you can imagine the pandamonium, co workers and bosses.

Overkill. Cheaters should pay but this was overkill.

AWESOME!!!!! I loved what used to be his manhood flying across the room.. I laughed my ass off!! Thanks for sharing this with the world!

No good characters to sympathize. Discouraging story.

What a cock up.....lol

LOL! Good story!

Gerald & Fiona, 2 slimy characters. Especially Gerald, fucking anybody with a vagina, evidently. Amazing his wife/ then fiance, didn't know about all his cheating. The retribution, swift & firm from both him & his wife. Loved the ending- "... now known as Geraldine, not Gerry, not Ger, but Geraldine." Almost fell off my chair laughing- didn't expect that. 4 stars; well written story, tho I did have some problem with some of the English words used. Bob

Good stuff, made me laugh,

no es hilarante, pero si es gracioso.

todo un dramedy

I mean, sorry does go a long way when you betray someone. It costs nothing. Just a conscious.

Another story that broadens my knowledge of the British language. In the USAF we used "safety wire" to secure anything being towed behind a vehicle to keep the tow bar clamp shut while traveling down the Autobahn, Autostrada, or the Motorway. And yes, I got to drive a duce and a half in each of them at least once during my two three year vacations in Germany.

Not my cuppa tea.

Oh, well. You blew the ending. Trending 5, ended 4.

She never said she's sorry. I'm sorry. She did say so in her own words! I don't care if they reconcile or not.

Oh, no! You ain't slipping that one past me. I've talked to Brits before (I'm a social rebel) and I know about your rhyming slang. That trick cyclist was actually a psychiatrist. I don't understand all the rules to this rhyming slang yet, but all my Brit friends assure me that I now have to buy the next round of beers.

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I've read better by this author. Stories in which characters are maimed or in some cases even killed don't usually sit right with me, even when the maimed party is a slimeball like Gerald(ine).

Geraldine...nice!! Fiona got away easy!!

Skanking wife deserved it

I like retribution but no maiming.

Second read and it's still good.

Great laughs. Thanks.

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That’s what I mean by retribution to the cheating wife’s lover.

To jazzharp:

No she didn't. She clearly said it was a mistake and won't do it again, and yelled what she did so Gerald would go harder, and it didn't mean anything. She didn't get close to contrition or atonement, besides her purported 18 months of celibacy (which maybe she did tell the truth), but never an actual apology. Remember he said can read people. What he read was not good.

Fiona is gangsta as fuck! lmao. Loved her. Glad she didn't have to do jail time.

I was leaning towards taking her back before the MC told her she never even said she was sorry. I Didn't realize she never apologized.

Fuck Gerald. He preyed on a married woman. Cheating on a spouse is like murdering them. He got what he deserved.

Check out the real life story of Lorena Bobbitt

4 stars, was going for 3 since the bitch didn't lose ANYTHING and he had to go to jail, but i like the author's other work so grading on a curve.

Knowing it is bad and seeing it is worse. It's hard to come back when you've seen it.

10 Big Blazing Stars for a Great Story. I loved the part where the cheating asshat lost his junk! I have been trying for weeks and weeks to get that approved on my latest "Feb Sucks" Ending to Mark LaValliere. LOL just can't say it so they will approve it by Lit Management. My latest attempt is burying the trio alive. LOL Very good effort and i really like your style. Thank You for your Effort. Buster2U

At least leave poor old Geraldine enough for the Operation - so she can play for the other team .....

He should have shagged "Geraldine".

A really fun read! Thanks!!