by dannychellette
She had unzipped his jeans. A few paragraphs later, he was unbuttoning his button-fly jeans.
When he brought the candles in, he turned off the lights. Then, during the storm, the lights went out.
Nice dialog and use of language to go along with a good story line. This could be expanded into several chapters.
... but terribly over-written. Less is more. Show don't tell.