by Emeraldfae
There are too many unanswered questions. Please keep going.
from chapter 1, with dark foreboding transformed into a form of teenage dating. The Hunter is still there, though, and one wonders where will it all go. Was the nurse/mother's sacrifice in vain? Does Eden need no saviour? We seem to be in a fuzzy world, but refreshing, perhaps, for its fuzziness. What will come next. Again, some editing would be useful.
Keep writing, young lady...
I wonder what direction you plan on taking this story...Will the mates be separated? Or have they even agreed to be mates yet? And what will happen to Eden if she is taken? Up until a few hours ago she thought she was human....looking forward to chapter 3