All Comments on 'A Night on Edge - Pt. 01'

Nice premise.

Nicely set up.

As well told as it was, an editor/proofreader would help.

Where did the candle come from?

Have you really heard any guy call his cock/penis/prick a "member"?

You wrote BARING DOWN when you meant BEARING DOWN.

He looked with his EYE (singular) into her EYES (plural).

Nothing with her edging him by the end of the story.

Four stars.