All Comments on 'A Pair of Au Pair Ch. 01'

Lots of possibilities; let's see where it goes.

Impossible to follow. whenever it got interesting, you went back. Too many of these I found myself hoping for a quick end to this boring story.

This entry had all the makings of a wonderful story but the flashbacks served as sort of handcuffs to make the story hard to follow. This writer is obviously seeking his own style. I wish him well.

Don't listen to them; your story's good. Keep going just as you are!

I liked the flashbacks. Made the story more lifelike. Not the usual churned out boring wham bam, thank you mam stuff. Keep going.

You have a story, but your self absorbed personality gets in the way. You should be out selling your autograph.