All Comments on 'A Room with a View'

Long, long ago I participated in a series of psychological experiments (not nearly as interesting) as a poor student who needed the $50 in funds for each experiment.

The story brought back some of the feeling of the unknown during those days. Strange connections do happen, they also happened to me at that time, however not as a result of the experiments. Well written and very enjoyable!

I thought Victoria’s role was a bit odd and that Charlie and Kayleigh would have had more interaction with any masturbation activity. Maybe have them even meet when a door opened between them. The possibilities are numerous.

Also, just a personal preference, using the past tense usually makes a story easier to read.

Oh wow, that's incredible to hear you took part in something similar. I do however feel stupid now for putting participation at such a high rate, clearly I had a bigger budget LOL! :) Thanks again for sharing.

Just wanted to say thanks so much for the feedback. This type of writing is pretty new to me so that's incredible helpful to know how to improve the next story. I haven't yet found an editor, so if you're up for reading my drafts and giving me more constructive feedback I'd really value the input.

I really enjoyed it, although it could have used some editing. Id be willing to help edit if you like. You can contact me via the tab on my profile here.