All Comments on 'A Slave to the Servants Ch. 35'

Oh and just a quick addition which shouldn’t be seen as a nitpick:

“Ciara is mate bonded family to my Brother's male breeder”

Made me think you need some paterian words. It’s like reading a literal translation of a 4+ part German compound word. ;)

As is it’s nice and alien and reminds you how different the way things work here. I just found it kinda funny is all.

“I don't like how Ciara doesnt really adapt to Pateria. She still nods even when others don't understand. She's just kind of selfish”

While I don’t disagree Ciara is a bit dense (I won’t be as harsh as others) there’s either good character or plot reasons for a lot of it. In the case of the nods and shrugs it’s a signifier of someone familiar with her (or rose or her daughters) as an actual person. It’s like her daughters’ sisters immediately (ok they get a few months really) picking up and speaking to her in English and the resistance members calling her Rachel earlier. It’s kinda used as the first level of recognizing Ciara as a person. Going from a group that understands human gestures to not helps signify that she’s no longer with those that understand or at least respect her.

There’s actually a lot of little stuff like this in the story to solidify the world building and I love it. This is part of what makes DW an excellent writer and I hope she is still reading an encouraged by these comments. There are a lot of nitpicks in these comments she shouldn’t be discouraged by, it needs an editing pass for grammar but I barely notice the incorrect words. There’s some story stuff that could be slightly tweaked based on feedback, Rue/Runen and Vesa vs her friend’s species are two recent examples but really none of that is needed and this story is wonderful as is.

I wonder what the General's reaction was to this new place...

It wasn't Vesa from another planet but the girl that hit Ciara in the back. She was behind her and not reported injured. Vesa got a broken nose or jaw.

This chapter has a little mistake. In a previous chapter it was said that Vesa was from a planet like and near earth but that her bones were very strong. In this chapter you are saying she is human and Ciara asks her if she is going to take a portal back to earth

Congratulations on the addition to your family!!! (An extremely belated congratulations haha. I only discovered this series about a week ago and I have been hooked ever since.) Thank you so much for sharing your writing with all of us!

I don't like how Ciara doesnt really adapt to Pateria. She still nods even when others don't understand. She's just kind of selfish.

You need therapy

HAHAHA!

You'd have done better to just not reply at all. Now I know it got to you. I had already forgotten about this until I saw your reply.

Glad you feel better being an anonymous twat posting something you could have easily sent private feedback to the author to point out for correction, even using a term you obviously have no idea what it means. You must be proud. Me? I'm glad you made it public so I had the chance to ridicule someone when they're thinking they're smart. It's my favorite pasttime.

As a matter of fact Observer7, I DO feel better. And gosh....thanks for your concern.

Silly Anon. That's a continuity error--far more forgivable and very easy to fix compared to an actual plot hole that can't be filled.

Also...do you feel better now that you've blared it publicly AND anonymously? Good for you. You still got it wrong yourself.

There IS a plot hole. Chapter 24-2, first page. She broke Vesa's jaw, not her nose.

Vesa is a human from Earth. Ciara broke her nose almost immediately and it was one of the other slaves that hung out with her that was from the planet with the really strong bones and broke Ciara's ribs.

There are no plot holes in DW's story :) lol Some typos here and there perhaps, but no plot holes.

i think Vessa and Rue & company are the shit. Vessa because she managed to be self confident and proud despite being a slave (truly remarkable) and Rue's crew for being crazy geniuses! And if Vessa stays id love to see them mated. Ha! good stuff.

but im confused didnt the brothers say Vessa wasnt human? that she came from a planet were their bones were as strong as the mens metal weapons? this may be a plot hole, but not a particularly important one i guess.

I hope we get to see how Mia fares before this is over. She was sweet I'm curious how she would be as a free woman.

Just as things were getting better Jonathan got attacked by aliens! I'm glad the wounds were superficial though. I hope they get there happy evrr after.

Again thank you for posting this rivetting story.

Ariana xx

If when under the influence of the great spirit, bonded brothers can survive, even after one or more are killed, brothers who have never met can synchronize their attack with out word, then I should think, if the kids are seperated for a while, say to visit their individual breeders, then no harm should come to them....they will miss each other but the first bonding is with their breeders and time away should be easily compensated by the original parent child bond. Its been noted parent and children can feel their well being from a distance, and in earlier chapters, Cristoph could be felt when he was away. The brothers only suffered when their link was broken....I vaguely remember that. So good flow of scheme Hur Wolf, very good!

This is not a flaw. As was explained many times, the family best functions as a network, and you will see how the story handles it. Just keep reading.

So there seems to be a pretty big problem with the way Paterian families work (or at least used to before the women put the men into compounds). If a male is bonded to 4 Brothers, who form a mate bond with a woman, who is in turn bonded with at least one Sister, and this family have a male child, this child will then bond to 4 Brothers who presumably each have their own breeders who will be bonded in their own family unit. How can this possibly be sustainable?

To give an example, Ciara and Evan have a son, Jonathan, who is bonded to 4 Brothers. What will happen when each of his Brothers (except Aiden, who is presumably an orphan) discover their breeders? Why should Ciara get to raise the family of children rather than any of the other Brothers' breeders' families?

The story is fantastic. The plot is complex without feeling contrived. I'm sorry I haven't been commenting more as I read.

Anyway, I think I found an artifact from the editing phase, like you were reminding yourself to think about something later...I do this sometimes in my writing. Anyway, you wrote "Think about this, is it clothes or cloths?" and I'm pretty sure it had nothing to do with what was going on in the story. Just thought I'd throw that out there. BTW, clothes we wear and cloths we make clothes from. ;)

Lastly, I'd just like to point out that I think this story is a cut above good. I think it's marketable should you be interested.

Couple chapters earlier, I asked some questions about the men-women history on the planet. You gave excellent explanation in this chapter. Now all pieces of the puzzle are in place. Thank you. Love your work. Hope you're having as much fun writing it, as we (readers) reading it.

It was something like-- CH36 is going to be another chapter that all happens in 1 day cycle. The battle still rages. Don't expect to see the birth.

Steve please don't stop commenting!!!

DW I feel like a stalker waiting and watching for the next chapter LOL and yes please publish!! I would love to have this on my Kindle to read when ever I want. I have already re read STTS and find a little something that i missed the first time. I just saw the new chapter is up YAYYYYYYY but damn i have to leave for work in a few and can't decided if i want to start it cause i wont be able to keep reading it lol!! I am so happy for you and your family that ya'll have a new little to love!!!!!!!

Again thank you to both Doc and Steve for your work and talent and sharing that with us. Writing and Editing are truly talents!

Kisses

Laurakaye

Yes. i second that, dont you dare stop commenting. it's been as great enjoying the comments as the stories, from you or any fan here.

Greeting from Vietnam.

ps: if DW ever make this to paper novel. i'd love to buy one, no matter how much it cost to ship to Vietnam. or how long i'd have to wait for it ( it'd be painful to wait though).

I absolutely LOVE your writing!!! I do hope you publish this as a paperback novel. I would buy your novel in a heartbeat. Your storyline and plot are spot on. You do an amazing job weaving together the fabric of the lives of your characters. LOVE, LOVE, LOVE IT!!!

Don't you DARE stop commenting I enjoy reading them.

I believe this series you started has been an excellent work of literature, I am glad I stumbled upon it, and I am actually upset that I have ran out of chapters to read in it. I will gladly wait for your next chapter. Please keep up the good work on your story.

You were missed more than you will ever realize. I am so glad you are back and that the baby is doing well. Congrats. I really loved the scene with Johnathon and his brothers and the kissing. There were tears and smiles I loved it. I can't say it enough I am so happy you are back.

sherrylee1015

It wasn't Vesa they were talking about. There were about four girls that attacked Ciara. They were talking about one of the others.

So look for it to post Wed., Thur. or Fri. [7/11 to 7/13]. Maybe Tue., but doubt I it.

Boy, I thought that thing about the ore being the "remains" of dead Paterians and somehow related to their telepathic bonds was a major revelaton.

I have been told by a few fans to avoid making comments, so I deleted my comment on CH36.

Jonathan is back! Yay! I love this! You can see how all the men are developing and how they connect! Though I do have a question how long is Ciara's pregnancy so far?.....it seem that she is due anytime now.......

Whatever happened to Mia, the slave of the family that sold the ornamentation in the compound? When they first went to the new Keepers, Mia was nice to them, then she just sorta dropped off the radar until after Ciara returned to the compound the first time and the men took her for new ornamentation. Then there was no more talk about her at the Keepers and now she's totally disappeared. I was hoping she would turn up with the other freed slaves.

I've read the the entire series for the third time now, and there is still almost a week till the next chapter is out... I'm dying! You know a story is good when you have readers who will stay up half the night to read "just one more chapter" on the third go round.

I love where you're going with this story and am delighted to hear that you and your baby girl are both healthy and well. Heartiest congratulations! Excellent story, 5/5! :)

Thank you for reuniting Ciara with her baby boy - and now she has lots of boys to Mama. One of my favorite chapters. I had to go back and read about Aiden and recalled how sad all of that was. I couldn't shake it so I'm happy to see them all together. What a great chapter!

Congratulations on your baby girl! I imagine her bedtime stories will be magical and oh so vivid.

Every time I read a chapter I think, "This is SO good! It really can't get any better." But then new chapter comes out and I'm proven wrong, the the new chapter is EVEN BETTER! Truly, DW, you are amazing! I bow to your genius!

I would pay to read this story! Your the best! Totally addicted and i cant wait for the next chapters!!!!!

Congratulations on your new baby and a fab new chapter.

Enjoy the days as they fly by.

Are the snakelike aliens edible? That would help with the food shortage. Vesa could be put in charge of collecting their dead bodies and getting them to the kitchen for barbecuing.

I love this story, and you are awesome!!!!! Can't wait for the CH36.... :)

1st off congrats on your little one! I am glad you took time off to welcome her into this world. Also, thank you for another great chapter. Your plot development is superb- you have consistently brought to life new elements of this foreign planet in a very unique way. The way the story continuously unfolds with new surprises is very addicting. Please continue feel free to continue this story for as long as you wish!

I was lacking good reading material and stumbled on so much more than what I expected. I haven't been able to stop reading. You have an amazing talent! You should definitely publish this as a book. It's so well written and detailed. I can't wait to read more! Congratulations on your baby :)

I am lucky I have only just discovered this story, so hopefully I wont have to wait as long as some to read the final conclusion. I have not been able to drag myself away from your words and I firmly believe that you should be publishing this as a book. You have created an original world different from any other I have read in Science Fiction stories and I think the rest of the world need to hear this story. Well done and CONGRATULATIONS on your new baby. Clever little breeder you!!!

Love that the family is finally all together again! One request: I'm getting everyone a little mixed up (the other families and Bane's boys) since it was so long between the chapters. Just a few extra words to reiterate relationships would help!

Or I could just re-read the last 5 chapters, which wouldn't be bad either, LOL

Enjoy your sweet bundle!

It's gonna be so hard waiting for the next couple chapters. Thank god I started now rather than earlier. My patience is terrible.

On your little one they grow so fast !!! Cuddle& kiss her as much as possible !!

I think I'm going to re read the other chapters I just love this story !!

I'm always a little disappointed when I reach the end of a chapter and have to wait for an update. You have an amazing gift. Please, don't ever stop writing.

It would make an awesome movie! Please if you do publish DON'T take it down from lit until it is about to be released as I am sure many if not all of us will be re-reading this story many times when it finally is complete. (although no one really wants to see it end)

Another fantastic chapter to my favorite (and ever so long running :)) story!

It's good to here that your little terror is well, DW, although, just be prepared... they grow crazily quickly. It seems only a couple of years ago, my boys (10 and 8) were tiny creatures, but damn, do they grow lol

Take care, and sleep when you have the time!

Nchy

First of all HUGE THANKS for not giving up and forgetting of all of us here suffering.

Too many good stories have abruptly ended without being ever updated. Big RESPECT for finding the time with your new addition. It is still a mystery to me how you can manage it all together. LOL

And question is - whatever happened to FUJI ? Didn't she heard there was a fight ? Or she just THAT selfish not to care anymore?

You really should consider publishing this piece, if not more of your work. If nothing else, I'd recommend publishing it in the E-reader format for kindles and nooks. A number of self made authors have already found success doing that. You've already drawn quite a fan base on this site, and speaking for myself I'd be happy to recommend this story for others to read and purchase. Whatever you decide to do, good job!

Also.. I think you posed a question mid-story. Clothes are worn (clothing).. cloth or cloths are nonspecific fabric woven from thread. The context you were using it in should be "Rhane and his Brother applied healing salve and wrapped both Aiden's and Jonathan's wounds in clean (cloth)."

Hope that helps.

1st - Congrats on your bundle of joy! It is a joy that I never got to experience - I wish you and your little one a wonderful future.

It has amazed me just how far the story has come and how well it has fit together. I especially liked how the young boys finally overcame their trepidation to bond with Ciera and her men. You are truly an excellent writer and I look forward to not only the next chapter, but your published works.

Another great chapter. Ciara has definitely come a long way as well as her boys. This really should be published. If any publishing house gives you grief, stike out on your own. You certainly have enough following at least on here to strike it big. I'll be one of the first to buy even though I've had the pleasure of sampling the story here first. That's called "supporting the local artist" lols. Congrats on the new little bundle too. Mine are all grown (pouts) so enjoy your little one because they grow in the wink of an eye ;) LH

i love your story so, so much. I'm so completely involved in it and love the development of all the characters. I'm particularly enjoying how the part Ciara plays in the camp has grown. Can't wait for the next chapter but at the same time don't want this story to end!

Huge congratulations on your baby btw!

Welcome back ^^ I'm supposed to be studying, but I couldn't help checking for an update. That's amazing, chubby babies are so adorable :D Alas, I was a sorta thin baby, was cute but no cheeks and all :P I could just imagine all the bedtime stories you could make up for her ^^ My mom's a mathematician, I'm just glad she didn't explain logarithms by my crib or something :P oh, AND I loved this chapter.. kinda went wide eyed/teary when Jonathan flinched away from her at first.. then kinda giggled (lame, I know) when Aidan was sleeping into her hair again. They're so cute -sigh- And that was an AWESOME twist.. the whole we're ore, made from the lava they put the bodies into.. just like we're coal with the pressure of the earth and all that... that's just freakin brilliant! :) Reminds me of Avatar, the Harmonious Spirit and being one with the planet and all

Congratulations for your baby! - You are so talented. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful story with us. Please keep up the good work.

to find another excellent chapter of STTS! You continue to enthrall us with your unique and imaginative storytelling, DW. I especially love the way you're depicting Ciara's family rebonding with their little boys. So much has changed in their world--it'll be interesting to see how they parent their newest daughter.

Congratulations on your sweet baby girl. Thank you for taking the time during this very busy time in your life to update with a wonderful chapter. I am so glad Jonathan is back! yeah!

Don't feel your baby is big! My first was 11 pounds. I lost fifty pounds after giving birth to her. By the way, I'm truly sorry I haven't commented earlier! At this point this story is more than eroticism. it has a plot, it's an ingenuous idea! Thank you for being a writer and having a brain. - Phalen

i love your story so much and i'm glad you kept ur promise about not leaving us hanging

Congratulations on your daughter's birth. Blessings to you all. You are so generous with your time and imagination! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

You've outdone yourself with this chapter, DW... It's great to see Ciara re-united with her family and have access to all her children. I can't wait for the birth of this child!

Congratulations on your baby girl, she's a big 'un!

Hi DW,

This is an awesome series, I'm looking forward to more.

Great addition to this story this new chapter blew me away. Congratulations on the birth of your baby, can't wait for the next installment.

Welcome back! I'm glad you and your baby are well and happy.

This was a great chapter. I loved the reactions the boys had to everything and everyone. The "stealth" exploration in the middle of the night was wonderful and hilarious. I really like the way you handle everyone's emotions. And again, as I'd said before, the little details, like Aidan and the hair, the shiny stones from the pool, the magnet metaphor... all contribute to the reader's deeper acquaintance with the characters. Beautiful.

Vesa's recovery is a little surprising and almost unrealistic though since the programming in these slaves is so deep, but I guess that's what you wanted to do as part of her stubborn, belligerent character... she doesn't even stay programmed! I have to say I really hate her which is of course only a reflection of how good a writer you are having your readers all wound up because of one character ;). I was rooting for Ciara to give her a good slap across the face! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Fabulous as usual! Glad to hear everything is well with you and your babe!

I will eagerly be awaiting the next chapter.

I just wanted to say that, I give blessings that she leads a happy and healthy life.

Moving to the story. I have to say, when Chapter 1 first came out, I read it and stop reading it halfway through. The story didn't appeal to me and I thought it was complicated.

A year passed and Chapter 33 came out. I had seen it getting into the Hall of Fame and many Literoticans praising it. So I decided to have another try.

Since I tried again, I understood and actually now love your story! Can't wait to Chapter 36 and I will be sad to see it finish. I hope the next series of stories - if you're planning any at all - will be just as good as this one.

My $0.02 :)

Regards,

Tommy.

as always an excellent chapter ! cant wait for more and I agree you should publish !

ironsoldier80 on you needing to turn this story into a novel. I know I would buy it in a heartbeat!! Love this story and love all of your characters....except Vesa, the nasty witch....lol! I can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Welcome back to Lit! Congrats on the birth of your not-so-little one.

The chapter was amazing, I was SO SO SO excited when I saw it on Tuesday, I had read it all before I even went to work. I don't even mind the lack of sex, I'm here for the characters and the story at this point.

My big question/ concern is Fuji. Where did she go? Where was she during the war? Is she still "visiting" Stayne and his brothers? She seems to have just disappeared... Also, where is Nu'reeh (sp?)? I am surprised she didn't turn up during the war... I am looking forward to that confrontation, I hope you haven't killed her off during the war.

Overall though, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Welcome back Doctorwolf! Nice chapter. When you are all finished you should think about putting this all together and publishing a book. It will make a great novel.

This is another great chapter ! I'm so glad you're back. Congratulations on the new addition in your family.

Great chapter and I'm so glad you're back, but man... my husband's working out of town and I needed some sex! XD <3 Can't wait for the next one.

This chapter is awesome, I love it. Glad to see you're back safely, and like everyone else has said, congrats on the little one. One thing I'd like to point out - about half-way up [age 4, where Jonathan is being seen to by the healers, there's an editor's comment that hasn't been removed.

I don't know why I'm surprised it's already way past my bedtime - you always keep me up late to read! Amazing as always DW, and I can't wait for more! Congratulations on your little one, and be sure to enjoy it! While I don't have any of my own yet, I do have my nephew, and I was just looking over pictures from his infancy just yesterday and my heart melted just a little at the realization at just how big he is getting. I'm sure it's worse when you have your own!

Keep up the good work, and I can't WAIT for the next chapter!!!

I am loving this story and was thrilled when the new chapter popped up, but I realized I suffer from a huge book hangover when I have to wait for more!

Congratulations on the birth of your 'little' girl, I'm jealous of the bedtime stories she is going to get.

You did it lady! you have a beautiful baby girl, big congratulations to you all, AND you still managed to put together another excellent installment on the schedule that you created for yourself. I have to ask, do you run around in a one piece with tights and cape with a huge SUPERGIRL printed on the front??? I think that you do...how else could you possibly accomplish all that you have in such short time? Excellent, EXCELLENT job DW I can't give you 10 stars but I would if I could! Great job MOMMY:)

I know you've heard it a ton by now but congratulations!!

Even though mine are only 5 and 7 it feels like a lifetime since they were that small.

Sometimes I wish they would revert back to infancy just cause it's easier. :)

I love the chapter and even though it's 5 pages It always seems like it's not quite enough. I can't wait to read the next one. Don't forget to have lots of fun playing with her in between writing chapters.

I still consider myself a new mama still, though my little girl is a whopping 25ish pounds and 16 months old. They start looking more like tiny humans than having smooshed alien faces soon, but I'm sure she's a beautiful baby nevertheless!

I'm also very happy that you're doing well enough to continue this story. I have missed it, but taking care of a tiny human is super important. Even if it's your first or nth time, it's still wonderful being a mom of a newborn baby :)

Congrats again, and I look forward to the next installment!

Girly, you do breed them big :) but I wish the best for you and your new blessing. I look forward to the next chapter, and I will be extremely impressed if you manage it soon. Have fun with your bundle of joy, and remember to get sleep whenever you can.

Glad you are back! Congratulation on your little girl! All the best! Glad they found Jonathan! Can't wait for more!

Like many others here, I've read hundreds, maybe thousands, of books in my life.

This is simply one of the best.

The writing is superb, blunt in some places and exceptionally subtle in others. I've loved most of the story, hated parts of it, but never stopped wanting more.

I don't know or care if you'll ever sell this story in book form, I'm just glad I was given the opportunity to read it.

As always another spectacular chapter. Even though they are 5 pages long it never seems enough! you ALWAYS leave us wanting more. Can't wait to see what happens next and I'll also say that this deserves publication.

Congratulation on one of the most beautiful miracles in life,the birth of your daughter.

You continue to amaze with your writing skills.Excellent chapter as usual, it was worth the wait and more. I am thrilled to see Jonathan reunited with the family.Love this chapter.

I am loving your story yoi had me from Bound to mate i read the whole tjon gon 2 days i could get enough. This story had me sitting on the edge of my seat i love it. I hope that my story beas wonderful as yours have been i cantwait till July to read the next chapter and find out what happens and who this baby or babies father is they all have beeb great, let alone find out what happen to the other female that owned them

Hi Dr W, congratulations on baby, well done.

This chapter was brilliant, and the whole story awesome, you really are a skilled writer, and after this book sadly ends, I will still look out for your next exciting adventure. XX

Once again another fantastic chapter! This story really deserves to be a published novel.

As for cloths versus clothes:

Cloths would be the plural for cloth as in fabric, not for clothing. The way you used it (cloths applied to wounds) it is correct to use cloths unless they are putting clothing on their wounds.

Clothes are article of clothing. Clothes are made from one or more cloths. Applying clothes to wounds would be to apply/press articles of clothing (for example a shirt or socks) to wounds.

You can also "clothe" a wound. In this case clothe is a verb meaning to apply cloth such that it covers the wound up. Clothes could therefore be used as a form of the verb clothe such as by saying "that person clothes wounds".

Hooray for English

I'm so in love with this story! I began reading this story a few days ago and was pleasantly surprised that even after 34 captivating chapters, there was still more to come. I swear it felt like Christmas morning when I checked to see if you posted another chapter and there it was. Thanks, Santa aka DW! You've struck literary gold with this one.

Thank you Dr wolf and congrats

I must also admit I did have a good laugh when the boys were on the bed "whispering" LOL and exploring mama and Johathan licking all the men and snuggling up to his daddy after telling his brothers that this was really family made me cry. Loved how the men each got to cuddle a child.

I still hope that Ciara becomes part of the GHS and all the camp show up when the bitch ex slave and the friends try yet again to beat her up.I also hope that this story continues until at least she give Bane his child and when they become admin. In chapter 60? A girl can only hope. LOL

this chapter from start to finish was awesome had to force myself to pause to feed the family. Sigh! As for the cloths or clothes I would have gone with dressings. LOL

Hope bubs gives you a chance to do a little writing while she sleeps don't worry about cleaning house that is what husbands are for. Aren't they?

As always fan 4 life. Willie (Hugs)

I was the one who had asked if you had a full file, as always your writing is amazing :) I got healthy enough to sit up and catch up I was so excited to see so many new chapters! LOL now I will wait patiently for more! Grats on your new shining bundle too, there is no sweeter gift in the world than a child, and with all the love you put into your writing, I am positive your angel will have a wonderful life :)

Somehow you've managed to make this story entirely more than just about sex. I don't know if I missed it maybe, but there was no sex in this chapter; you didn't even mention that there wouldn't be in the beginning like you used to; and I didn't mind at all!!! I can't even begin to describe what a feat that is. I've read quite a few stories on here and others have had such strong plot that, with warning, there could be no sex in a segment and that'd be okay.

Ms. Wolf, your story is a tier above that. I don't even come to the story looking for sex anymore. The site is called Literotica, many many many facets of the site are geared towards sex. Yet, somehow you've made it so that I type Lit in the address bar as if I'm going to the bookstore! I just type it in, sometimes forgetting to even check around me because this is still in fact a sex story site, and just come to find the novel-worthy story that has had my attention for the last 2-3 months now.

This is my first comment on here, possibly my only one, but I feel the sincere urge to let you know you've made a masterpiece here. I'm not sure a story like this can be topped, even by yourself. With the newborn, if you decided to finish this story strong and use it as your farewell piece. You'd still be the number one author on the site in my opinion, no questions asked. That is not to say, "you should leave you've things to do" no no, we all have things to do. What I am trying to say is that if anywhere in your heart/mind you were even slightly worried about whether this story was worth all the effort you put in, you've hit gold madam. You've won.

Congrats on the big beautiful baby girl! And this story is absolutely amazing. You should be so very proud and feel extremely blessed.

AMAZING as always!!! Was hoping we'd find out more about Ciara's special baby though! LOL

& congrats on YOUR baby!!! :)

Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!! ~

MMMOOORRREEE PLEASE!!!!! ;)

Congragulations on you and your husbands baby girl. Take the time to watch her now, she will grow up so fast.

I have been waiting for this chapter for the last week. Been checking every night for it to come out. You have again put together a great chapter to a wonderful, tantilizing, page turner book. I can not wait for the next chapter to come out.

I believe that with some more editing and rewirting of some of the scenes that you can submit this and have it published and the critics will describe it as the next Harry Potter!

Where was Fuji during the war? With her attitude and power she would have been right in the middle of the war fighting along side all the men. Hope she is not left as a loose end.

its a wonderful chapter with so much going on. i like how you focused a bit more on individual characters again, in that insightful way you have. its a long 5 pager but seems to end so soon! congratulations on your tvailk baby girl! thank you :)

now im going to reread the chapter to pick up on those things i missed cuz you pack so much into your chapters!

Congrats on your baby girl. I love this story and it just keeps getting better!

I hope that Ciara isn't headed for a difficult birth. I wonder how her family would react if she did. Congratulations on your beautiful baby. I grew mine big too, and I still cherish all 5 of my girls. I hope you will find time to continue writing. Just pace yourself.

I must say i have been checking daily to see if another chapter has been posted and this one does not disappoint!!