All Comments on 'A Stop in Time Ch. 01'

by mrmark83

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Sex4lf57Sex4lf57about 6 years ago

So basically it's a rape watch. Bill Cosby would have loved one of those.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
I Would Love One of These

Can't wait for chapter 2

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Why is it the first thing that happens is he rapes a woman?

He has a watch that stops time, compels truth and reverses the last 60 seconds...and the very first thing he does is rape a woman he doesnt know and raw dogs it, risking pregnancy, STDs or, and i guess if he’s a rapist, then age isn’t a consequence either.

And why the hell would a person give away the watch to a stranger and simply say “Bye”?

mrmark83mrmark83about 6 years agoAuthor
Calm Down!!!!

Sorry if this has offended people! It's only meant to be a bit of fun! not like this happens in real life. This is a story website, if you don't like it don't read it. I'm all for free speech but the comments are just laughable when they are made to seem like real life things! There are worse stories on here than this! Chill out a bit!

Cracker270Cracker270about 6 years ago
"The Girl, the Gold Watch, and Everything"

by John D. McDonald. Might take a look at it, but then again I suspect you might already have.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

Nice story! Don't worry about the haters. It's always weird when folks go off about consent when this is posted under 'mind control'. I hope the girls in the future are not enjoying it at much :) have fun with it!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

I love the idea behind this story and it’s well written. Very intrigued to find out what happens next, the possibilities are endless. Good imagination. Keep it coming!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
"Consent"

You can safely ignore people complaining about "consent" on Mind Control or Nonconsent stories. They literally are trolling Literotica to complain about stories like this. They think they're being good little activists.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Hmmm

Might be fun though it is an overused premise. Get an editor and don't rush so much.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
When it comes to timing

It's a hot idea for a story. Would love to read more. Just don't rush the story so much. Let him play wih herz explor her. Give us sth to read. Other than that, I loved it. :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
It's been done

Prolific mystery/adventure writer John D. MacDonald expanded this idea into a very funny and good book, "The Girl, the Gold Watch & Everything," I think the title was. It was even made into a movie -- the movie not being as explicit as the book. Have at it.

pimptasticlypimptasticlyabout 6 years ago
Book to check out

The end all be all example of this premise is Nicholson Baker’s The Fermata, which is astonishingly hot, creepy, and compelling all at once. I love this genre. The Japanese have made many many a porn (or JAV) exploring this, hours of watching. It is a bit rote in form but every so often there is a twist, my favorite is the school girl who run around molesting teachers. Fun times.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago

when is chapter 2 happening

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