All Comments on 'A Story of Betty and Eric Ch. 01'

Promising start

This is fantastic.

Very uncool that she didn’t even attempt to satisfy him and left him hard. In the story as written, he’s strong enough, independent enough and has enough pride to walk away if she keeps it up.

Why?

Great STORY!!! Keep it going :)

Great characters, great scene, great clothes. Best Ive read in a while.

Good story. Very enjoyable. you are bringing it along nicely. Keep up the good work.

great power dynamic, has a nice build up cant wait to see her really whip him into shape while he begs for more!

Loving it so far.

WTH,, doesn’t anyone think this author needs an editor?? It’s a goddess beginning but the odd grammar choices, the mistaken tenses, the missing adjectives and prepositions hurt the readability of the story. And, worst of all, the clipped sentence structures—dropping important words and infinitives is just lazy writing. Wether intentional or just mistakes these things are ruining a good story. You have a very high score in your last installment but I don’t know if I have the tolerance to read on. You have a good imagination. There are free and willing editors on the site. You’d really benefit from using that service.

I like it very much (and do not care much about any grammatical errors)!

I,m a obedient sissy for my wife,she wears always lingerie and high heels for work&home &going out,showing off to tease men,even family but It turns me so much on i cum in my pants