by NewJomama
there were so many errors it was impossible to get involved with the story. she starts out as 21 years old, and in the same page is 16. He has been practice both 25 and 30 years. and on and on and on.
please take the time to proof read before posting
Errors, inconsistencies, lack of even rudimentary knowledge of psychonalysis . . . the list of negatives is long. One feels, for a beginning, the writer could benefit from a reading of Strunk and White's Elements of Style.
The story was not realistic at all... The IQ was barely above average... I just despised it.
I'm not going to say that this was the greatest story I've read. The vicious way Kelly admits going about her seductions simply killed any erotic feelings tat may have developed. Basically she's a sexual predator who will probably become the target in someone's telescopic sight.
My opinion anyway.
kydreamer
Very well written; I demand more, quickly!!
although a bit too long,it was very thought out and not just a slam bam story.
I stopped reading pretty quickly. A good story is realistic and accurate; this story is neither. A Stanford score of 110 is within one standard deviation from the mean and so is absolutely not the score of a genius. By all accounts, the designation of "genius" requires a score of 140 or higher, roughly 2.68 standard deviations above the mean.
Wow. Absolutely great. Best story I've read in at least a year. Kinda just... ends abruptly, though.