All Comments on 'A Stumbling Marriage Pt. 04'

A good tale about the collapse of a marriage. Being truthful, Shona is only with Andrew because of his money.

If you can't at least get the names of the characters, give up writing. It is so confusing when get mix up the names.

Oh, but this is English gentlemen country. Both Shona and Karen decided they wanted stronger more assertive men. That's why the Yanks had such success bedding the English cunts. Andrew should have crippled George, and definitely fucked up Jordan. But, hey, he is still a gentleman. And a patsy cuckold.

Is stuck with aworthless piece of shit for a wife. Who we all know is carying Jordens babyshe stoped her pills before she became a slut .Just another cum sucker who hates men and makes all men worthless. Look at ever man in this story there not one of good stock .Hubby a cry baby prick the boyfriend is a slut chaser who breaks and ruins marraiges the friends are faggots. Out of all the men not one is worth a crap.the good person is Kate and hope and carma will make her hubby a cheater for payback for not telling Andrew his wifes a ho. There a old saying paybacks a bitch kate what goes around comes around!

They both have issues; but my complaint isn't the lies or violent jealousy, it's this notion that people cant control themselves.

Andrew chooses to be jealous because he is insecure and should be in therapy. He whines about how Karen cheated on him and believes that Shona is going todo the same. Well boo fucking hoo! Then why get married? If you can't trust your partner then why get married at all?

You made Dhona sound like a cock starved teenager. She just had to have Jordsns cock. Why? She wasn't drunk or in lust or even insane, so why did she lose her fucking mind over it? She didn't even feel remorse or shame over her adultery so how can she adequately claim that she loves Andrew? She even said that if Jordan wanted her to fuck him in front of Andrew, the man she claimed to love, she would so how is that love?

Please tell me because I'm dying to know.

Lastly, Jordan. Why would be say that Shona is high maintenance when she did everything he said, when he said it? She played sick and fucked him 4 times in her house, so why wouldn't he stick it to his colleague one last time and fuck her in front of him? Why wouldn't he get her pregnant with his child? He clearly didn't like Andrew or Shona so why not stick to both of them one last time?

Could have been a great story but instead you created unbelievable characters doing idiotic things.

shona is a whore and what.

To hell with her! She doesn't deserve andrew!

How stupid can she be? is she expecting to hide her cheating? She forgot she let her lover to take a lot of pictures? Those pictures will be soon seen by her husband...Then what? She will become what that man told her: "did she still show her pussy around...", and will become the town whore...1*

Clueless husband story. Andrew could have any suspect but he did not get any evident. Shona was a cheating cunt, but he could stopped at the last Christmas job party. I do not know their future. What is the opinion of the author?

the writer gets off on turning the husband in to a trusting fool with a big heart. Hopefully you wont turn in to another of the cuckold lover with delusions of grander.

I enjoyed the series. The way it ended kinda sucked but overall, it was good imo. This series reminded me of TheTalkMan's stories but I still enjoy reading his a lot more than yours. Keep practicing mate. :) Good luck on future stories. I actually love these rivalry stories. Lol.

This writing business is not something you're good at. Still, if you enjoy it, fill your boots.

What a dirty pig who's punishment should be the divorce her husband gives her. There's no reason to abuse him like that and his jealousy was obviously justified. She has totally humiliated him , people will always be talking behind his back about how his wife was a pig for his biggest advissary at work . She made him a fool forever and herself a cheating slut

Very poorly written. You needed a great editor to save this. Difficult to read and when you combine it with thoroughly detestable characters you have a story that is neither clever, original or entertaining. Just no fun to read. UGH!

Who in this mess is lovable? Your readers need one to root for. As it is everyone of them could fall off a cliff and no one would regret it.

This could have been a good story. I think a good editor could have turned this into something spectacular. He/she could have suggested a general direction for this story as well as made it flow better. Also, the ending kind of felt stilted. Not because she got away with it, but because we have no idea where they go from here. None of their issues were addressed. It just simply stopped.

I see some potential with this author, but I also see the need for a good editor. Don't feel bad, I suffer the same affliction.

And Jordan needs to die.

.....and Andrew will be gutted by her avid betrayal, when it comes out.

Let's hope he's man enough to hunt Jordan down and beat him senseless, then fuck his new wife.

You made Andrew out to be a Pussy from the first words he "spoke" in the story. Should of let him find out his wife was a cheating slut and divorced her.

Fucking cunt slut, whore

No one to care about here. Shona is a slut. Jordan needs to die, but Andrew s too much of a wimp to punish either one.

Simply ended as a mess all round.

Sooner or later Shona's exhibitionism with Jordan is going to come home to roost as nearly happened with that last guy.

Meantime Andrew is too much of a wimp to tell his wife that married women do not go out dancing unaccompanied. Disregarding all else did she learn nothing from the near miss with the date rape drink?

None of these people are worth a cuss.

What a shit show